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green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

0 posted 2004-09-15 03:25 AM

Blanking falls thrown fat and dead
Lovely pratice stupid jerk
Locked dearly in my head
Purging razors roasted smirk

Stuck here
Trapped inside
Prison prophecy
From a father's love

Obnoxious mental wrong decide
Which direction is tight in me
Wars of battle telepathy
Psychic connect raw hate me

Junk intake
Overload
Tiny bites
And I explode

Improved caring must await
Pagan bastard fool of late
Break this aimless living flow
With no ideas I've broken though.

He has made everything beautiful in its own time. -Ecclesiastes 3:11

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

1 posted 2004-09-15 01:37 PM

You come up with some killer lines:

Purging razors

and this stanza just floats:

Junk intake
Overload
Tiny bites
And I explode

btw I am using that quote of yours
It will be in Open . . .
Thank you Craig
(rusted passion)

here ya go Craig, thank you:

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River
Senior Member

since 2003-09-16

Posts 627
my own little world

2 posted 2004-09-15 02:35 PM

Dude, this is like oozing with...a dark feeling. (ha, get it, the dark poetry forum...?) ok seriusly, your giving me chills with this, because I could feel your words. not kidding.

- Bon

"Stained by the sun, I can see colors...colors of mercy washing over me." - 3 Minutes From Home

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

3 posted 2004-09-16 02:13 AM

Thank you littlewing, And "Flux" is very cool. It's cool that you let me contribute to it.

And thank you too River. Thats cool that my work can be felt like that by someone over 1,500 miles away. Hey give me a call sometime at about 1:30am my time on a Friday at my mother's house.
-GIS

He has made everything beautiful in its own time. -Ecclesiastes 3:11

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

4 posted 2004-09-16 12:44 PM

Glad you liked how I used YOUR words and on the contrary, YOU allowed ME to contribute . . . thank you

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

5 posted 2004-09-16 10:27 PM

I'm *smiling* finally. lol. My spirit's crazy.

He has made everything beautiful in its own time. -Ecclesiastes 3:11

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