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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand 
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Don't Hold my hand Don't say my name Don't kiss my lips Don't make me smile Don't sing Don't talk so sweet Don't lie so near Don't look in my eyes Don't laugh with such perfection Don't move your hands Don't touch me and make me long for you Don't leave me here Don't love me Don't let me go Don't love me Don't leave me alone Don't love me Just Don't love me say wat you will, say what you mean, but you could never offend cuz your dirty words come out clean |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
A bit annoying, and it didn't have a nice rhythm. But it was alright. The theme was good. Hollow. P.S I need to hear your song P.P.S Write another poem  I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World. |
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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
i disagree with courtney, i didn't find it annoying, i quite liked it. Kirst. Tomorrow, is the today we feared yesterday. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
This is far from annoying OMG it is brilliant! The sing-songy pattern of this shows the thought pattern of one who really wants to be loved but is afraid of hurting another by their darkness inside and writing it like this is amazing because to me it sounded like thoughts crazily going through my head, like thoughts do - in seconds flat . . . Don't let me go Don't love me Don't leave me alone Don't love me Just Don't love me What a keeper. Laura - nice job |
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