Dark Poetry #4 |
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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
In the mirror stands a girl, Her hair hangs limp and thin Her face is shrunken in on itself Her eyes are unresponsive Cold, dark, deadened. The body unrecognisable Bones jutting through paper thin skin Like a twig, it seems it will snap. Outside the mirror stands a girl, Looking in on herself Her hair hangs limp and thin Her face is swollen Threatening to escape the mirror Her body, just as gigantic. Layers of fat cover all trace of bone. But her eyes remain the same Cold, dark, deadened. A tear trickles down one cheek Making its slow descent She raises her fist in pure disgust Punches the mirror, with full force. Cracked, torn, pieces fall Breathing hard, body trembling She stares at her eyes in the distorted mirror They remain the same Cold, dark Dead. Tomorrow, is the today we feared yesterday. |
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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
hey, umm...i forgot to add as a note at the end, this poem, unlike my others, isn't related to my life..it is based on a fictional character. Tomorrow, is the today we feared yesterday. |
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brezee Member
since 2003-06-02
Posts 140 |
this is cool, I like all the imagery and detail put into this. great job and keep it up. btw i think most of your writings are really cool ( I say most b/c I haven't read all of them...) ~*brezee*~ |
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click1 Member
since 2003-03-25
Posts 152usa |
It takes a broad mind to see both sides of the mirror. Well done! Click |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Great Kirsty. I think this is the best, honest. Flawless, it lingers in my mind now and it's taken me half an hour to reply. Spectacular write. Hollow. I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World. |
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aussie teen Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396Australia |
this is an amazing write.... i know these thoughts.... although that is all in the past this brought everything back.. reminding me of where i have come from... this is amazing... absolutely amazing.... i love all your work... the more of it i read the more jealous im getting of your writing... keep them comin.. Ruth live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever...... |
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peaceful_dreamer Member
since 2003-04-25
Posts 159SoMeWhErE oVeR tHe RaInBoW |
Wow - this is really good. I know how your character feels, and I'm sure many others do too. You have a beautiful talent. "I'm just me, trapped in a body." |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
This is cool. Its kinda like what I'm starting to do. I have my own world and I don't really care if its real or not, but its there. hehe. -GIS He has made everything beautiful in its own time. -Ecclesiastes 3:11 |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
it just goes to show that no matter who/what we are: all of us hurt Nicely done, I like the transition. |
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