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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
The serrated edge digs into my skin Let the hurt wash over me Kiss the cuts upon your arms Shiny red, against stark white Make all your pain, just go away. Entrapped in this world of misery and fear Alone we stand Together, apart Wanting, needing, knowing But devoid of having Crying inside, screaming for help Blank smiles cover all, they think you're fine I see through your hardened shell I feel your desperation Can you feel mine? Tomorrow, is the today we feared yesterday. [This message has been edited by vampiana (09-11-2004 08:43 PM).] |
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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
damnit...i made a typo...its supposed to be "your hardened shell" not "you"..damn, my damn stupidity... Tomorrow, is the today we feared yesterday. |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
"Kiss the cuts upon your arms Shiny red, against stark white Make all your pain, just go away. Entrapped in this world of misery and fear Alone we stand Together, apart" This was my favorite part. i can relate so well to this one, its sort of scary.... Keep up the amazing work! Karissa I ask why, but in my mind, |
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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
Thanks heaps for the reply...its so good getting positive feedback. Tomorrow, is the today we feared yesterday. |
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brezee Member
since 2003-06-02
Posts 140 |
i like how you did the ..."Together, apart" the oppositeness...ahh, inspiration! nice write!  ~*brezee*~ |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
If you want to fix your screw up click on the edit icon at the top of the poem and change it. Again, I liked this poem. Its pretty much the way life is for those in the realm of suffer for poetic beauty. Nice poem -GIS He has made everything beautiful in its own time. -Ecclesiastes 3:11 |
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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
i entered a poetry competition, and i submitted this poem. it is a semi-finalist and is being published in a poetry anthology at the end of next year. "I cannot stand the way you tease, I love you though you hurt me so"-Marilyn Manson |
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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
actually.. ..it's not anymore, because those stupid americans think that it's got UNSUITABLE CONTENT Pride is holding your head up, when everyone else has their's lowered. Courage is what makes you do it. |
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