Dark Poetry #4 |
Her Black |
vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
When shall the rain fall? The black clouds are fit to burst Dark, ready to explode They cannot keep it inside And so the refreshing raindrops begin to fall An easy release, seemingly so simple. She locks it all up, tries to throw away the key Wishing to be a raincloud Her pressure is building, fizzing warningly But still the lid is kept shut. Blinking back prickling tears, burning cheeks Her mouth stays a frozen line Ignoring her personal raging storm, as the thunder claps overhead Letting it continue to grow, a swirling, seething mass Until it simply cannot be contained. In the calm before the storm Some say you could have heard a pin drop A cold eery silence, fumagated the hallway like toxic gas But as sudden as the silence came, it was lost Replaced by high pitched screaming, full body crying Shoulders quivering, she claws at her face, rips at her hair The black seeping out, oozing from every pore Her bleeding heart exposed, she flees. Running to the bleakest, darkest corner, hidden from sight like a monster She trembles, not only from sheer cold, but from fear. Fear that now they know, now they all know She can't cover, can't lie, can't pretend, because now they know. Consoled only by the feeling of the black, being gone But crouching in the mud, shaking with anxiety She wonders, was this a fair trade? "Cut myself on angel's hair and baby's breath"-Kurt Cobain |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
omg i am in shock this is amazing i have no idea what to say, its just so raw and true and it dusnt hold bak...... was it laura hu sed dat? i think maybe. wow amazed loveandempathy darkness nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world. |
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brezee Member
since 2003-06-02
Posts 140 |
HOLY! swear! haha, I'm at a loss for words, as well...whew!..."Ignoring her personal raging storm, as the thunder claps overhead Letting it continue to grow, a swirling, seething mass Until it simply cannot be contained."....i LOVE THIS! awesome job!...wowee!... ~*brezee*~ |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
Thats a pretty freaking sweat poem. Nice job on the bloody details. lol. -GIS He has made everything beautiful in its own time. -Ecclesiastes 3:11 |
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~K~ Member
since 2004-07-27
Posts 148 |
This is a good title. Solid, engaging. The poem seems to run a little long though. That is probably just me though since I have a really short attention span. I enjoyed it regardless. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Kirsty: this is amazing! it reminds me of Pink Floyd's, "The Wall" as one trapped inside oneself wanting to get out yet afraid to show what is inside . . . |
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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
thanks for the comment littlewing. lol. i've got 'the wall' on dvd. its so cool. Tomorrow, is the today we feared yesterday. |
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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
blah. |
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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
sorry..just gotta write something so i can put it in my library..i blimming forgot AGAIN |
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