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Stick to the plan |
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MyCrimsonTears New Member
since 2004-09-04
Posts 8 |
panic pure and simple she was not supposed to come through the door it was not acording to the plan all i was supposed to do was go in get the money and get out but no some stupid little girl had to come in when i saw her and the look on her face i just freaked i was so scared as she screamed bloody murder so frightend by this i put the few pounds of force need to set all this off she it the floor with a thud making noises through the hole in her throat my eyes wide and jaw droped, i was stuned, i had really done it now frearing for my life i ran, droping the gun and the money only looking back for a split second to see some one one hunched over her. i ran and ran screaming in my head, looking for some one to blame. the hole thing was just one wrong turn to a nother. if i only... this is the 2nd build of this poem let me know what you think.i also thought i could name this "the if game"... |
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brezee Member
since 2003-06-02
Posts 140 |
Great job....I think that title would fit, as well...I like this, in that, it's got a lot of suspense and it's rather exciting, and possibly a little scary depending on how you look at it...I likes!  ~*brezee*~ |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
i agree w/ brezee. Very awesome. I like the name also. Cant wait to hear more. Karissa I ask why, but in my mind, |
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