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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
This is the stuff that'll make you sleep. Will it be in my car, thrown through the windshield scraping along the road grinding flesh under wheel? I want you to count your deep, full breaths. Will I be in bed, calmly getting my free dose slowly relaxing and sifting into a still sleep? When it comes will I be ready? my self may resist they might not expect it Will I accept our end as we all do in the beginning? 2+2=5 for sufficiently large values of 2 |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
It confused me a bit, but the words had a glow around them, maybe I was hallucinating and deprived of sleep, but I just really appreciated this poem at the moment. And, you have a great talent. Hope you post more, this is the first write I've read of yours. Hollow. I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Kevin, this is amazing and quite philosophical there in the end . . . It made me think of Jim Morrison ". . .going out smiling like a child in a cool remnant of a dream . . ." very nice writing |
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