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KuruShio Member
since 2003-11-18
Posts 110
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dimmed vision, by blighted mist hides these lips, to soft, to kiss fraternal joinings we still greet with claws and guns, so they retreat in damned minds, damned thoughts the ship's come in, but the dock has rot hold a blade for me as i run twist it harder, i'm not quite done knoledge reveals that vague shadow that we are as useless as a broken window old rage runs rampant still still held back, by my faltering will but we all dance on hidden strings yes we all dance on hidden strings Neither night nor day can give me purchase only purged dust on earth can avenge the worthless. |
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PainBaneChaos Member
since 2003-10-17
Posts 150The point of no return |
"yes we all dance on hidden strings" Very nice. Sad and beautiful and just right. |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
I agree with Pane. Very sad and beautiful. I loved it. Karissa I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
I must confess that I did not have a very firm grasp of what it was you were trying to say with this piece. The sounds were good, but the language could be fixed up a bit. 2+2=5 for sufficiently large values of 2 |
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