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littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

0 posted 2004-08-29 07:04 PM

The ice of night
fades with the drench
of first morning light,

Oh, ether and stars which shine,
I beg of thee . . .
as I lie my weary head upon the grass,

wet with dew
once warm
once welcomed
once you

Once upon a time I thought
that the glare of winter
had left me even when Frost himself
pointed a bony finger at me
waggling:

Now is your time, missy

I really thought that once again
I would feel the sun upon my cheeks
brushing them pink.
My held held high,
laughing, as you chased me
through wildflower and wheat.

And the sun did shine,
of course it did.

This time I just held my head.

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 2004-08-29 09:45 PM

LittleWingedOne~

'as I lie my weary head upon the grass,

wet with dew
once warm
once welcomed
once you'

Oh, I have known that place upon the grasses~
Poignant penning, poetess~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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aujussy wolf

Senior Member

since 2003-08-09

Posts 1215
Michigan

2 posted 2004-08-29 11:08 PM

I really thought that once again
I would feel the sun upon my cheeks
brushing them pink.
....
little w ,
there is always a chance
hugs~ j

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

3 posted 2004-08-30 03:13 AM

I'm being honest when I say I loved it. It just made me want to read on, and it was sad and beautiful.

Hollow.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

mysticpoe
Senior Member

since 2003-02-28

Posts 883

4 posted 2004-08-30 07:49 AM

That light within us, does it follow us or we it, or both. I just know one needs and wants the other. It always see's us, because of it within us. But, when we see it and hold it. We realize how nice coming home can really be. Keep paving that road in front of you with light lw, it wants to be with you. It wants to be with all of us. Very nice.

wayne

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

5 posted 2004-08-30 09:39 AM

sighing here
your heartbeat is heard, loud and clear
your smile looks good in any color, but upon a pink blush...
*sigh*

spritrider87
Member

since 2003-05-31

Posts 294
NH

6 posted 2004-08-30 11:56 AM

I think I know what you are talking about here. Because I have been waiting for the sunsine to come back into my life though with me it is an unatainable dream. hope things get better for you.

As I look at this world and realize that I am the only one to have seen the end of all Good I let the tears out that and ask the world to see them.

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

7 posted 2004-08-30 03:53 PM

Astrology alert:

Pluto goes direct today.

sigh.

Well it can't hurt, wince, can it?

Just a message from the madhouse, Susie.

*shaking my head*

ssdd...

have a candle, susie?

This has truly been the summer from Hell.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

8 posted 2004-08-30 05:08 PM

Thank you so much Marge . . .

aww James - seems as there were too many
*smile*  thank you *hugs*

Thank you so much Hollow - that was sweet
and made me smile

awww Wayne . . . you know you have become quite enlightened since I have been gone .  . thank you for that up there-
it means the world to me and *sigh*
yes, I want to GO back home . . .
to that light, the good place you know?
Your words are beauty . . .

Thank you Kacysis - I know you know . . .

spirit?  you got in, nailed it right on and thank you - here is hoping for brighter
days for us both . . .

Karen?

Thank GOD . . . I thought I was having another nervous breakdown . . .

*holding hand to mouth
stifling a childish giggle*

Thank you K . . .
your words mean the world to me
they always will . . .

and yes . .  more like THE year . . .

thank you guys

Purity
Senior Member

since 2001-11-20

Posts 526
Once Upon, USA

9 posted 2004-08-31 11:09 PM

LW - I was blown away at your mastery on this one. "ether and stars I beg of thee". Indeed... and then there was the title. That didn't hit me until after I had read it a few times. Here, here! It would seem the light is radiating from within you enough to hold your head infinitely high regardless of the sun or stars! (Now ether - that's another story, eh?) KUDOS!!

Lose one friend... Lose all friends... Lose Yourself...

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

10 posted 2004-09-01 11:20 PM

I read this once before, but I was kinda scattered and couldn't concentrate. But this time was a little different, I've found a solution to that problem. Though you might not like the way I deal with it. I just say, "No thank you." The first time the issue rises. May not be the best way, but for me it rocks, and gives me less to worry about.
-GIS

~K~
Member

since 2004-07-27

Posts 148

11 posted 2004-09-02 02:41 AM

This is Very beautiful. I loved it.

What a great line this is:

And the sun did shine,
of course it did.

Can't wait to read more!

~K

p.s. (just a little mad)

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

12 posted 2004-09-07 02:05 PM

Thank you guys for being so generous,
you have made me smile . . .

fractal007
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

13 posted 2004-09-07 04:41 PM

Your poem did not seem to come very clear to me. However, you seem to be conveying a good deal of disappointed nostalgia here. I liked your wording about the sunlight compared with water at the beginning of the poem.

2+2=5 for sufficiently large values of 2
--Smit
My Creations

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

14 posted 2004-09-08 07:39 PM

It seems our life revolves in seasons - some dark, some bright, but through it all, head held high, we survive the frost to find the sun.

Enjoyed this-

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

Goldenrose
Member Elite

since 2003-05-30

Posts 3665

15 posted 2004-09-10 05:05 AM

This was a good poem Sue...especially the frost part...should it be ''head held high''though...?....

Thank you..

Goldenrose.

The supreme happiness in life is the conviction that we are loved. Victor Hugo.

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

16 posted 2004-09-10 07:35 PM

Wow..this was amazing. I really loved it a lot. It just had such a flowing sweetness..if that makes any sense at all.

I think i will save.

Karissa

I ask why, but in my mind,
I find i cant really rely on myself.
~~~Linkin Park~~~

River
Senior Member

since 2003-09-16

Posts 627
my own little world

17 posted 2004-09-15 02:47 PM

ooooh...nice one! I liked, it's very sweet... anyways, later chikadee.

- River

"Stained by the sun, I can see colors...colors of mercy washing over me." - 3 Minutes From Home

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

18 posted 2004-09-16 01:14 PM

Thanks fractal, sometimes I tend to wander of with my thoughts . . .

Yes we do Susan, yes we do - thank you

Phil, I wish it were held held high but no.
Thank you.

Thank you Karissa - yes, it makes sense -
I despise if something I write doesnt flow . . . thank you

Thanks River, as always

Thanks guys

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