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Dark Poetry #4

Into the Night

Tim
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since 1999-06-08

Posts 1794

0 posted 2004-08-26 12:00 PM

As I traverse
in darkened depths
of melancholy
I sense the beat
of hollowed hearts
sounding forth
in ceaseless volley-
begone ye screams
of silence
harbingers of pain
you mock in isolation as
I loathe your harsh disdain
my soul is torn asunder
as I journey through the night
in seek of dispensation
in loathe of Charon’s bite.

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

1 posted 2004-09-05 03:07 PM

This is a nice piece of poetry. It just about falls out of the mouth as you read with mysterious to it and has a gothic feeling to it. Its quiet and calm as well.
Nice write.
-GIS

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fractal007
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since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

2 posted 2004-09-05 08:24 PM

This poem kinda reminds me of a more individual version of Dylan Thomas's "Do Not Go Gentle Into That Good Night." The speaker is trying to find a way out of death. But the lines "begone ye screams / of silence / harbingers of pain" present a sort of irony. The very silence of the inevitable victims of death is but a reminder of the speaker's ultimate fate.

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Hollow_Emptiness
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since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

3 posted 2004-09-06 04:08 AM

"Hollowed Hearts"

Had to reread it before replying, and now that I have. It made more sense....and those two words...just stood out. Thank you.

Hollow.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

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