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Treasures In The Attic
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Treasures In The Attic |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989
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~Treasures In The Attic~ It was there, in that dreary place where I had never wanted to go hiding in the corner, covered in dust I found words I would come to know. I remember the day so vividly up the attic steps I did climb a treasure was found in the corner the day that I was introduced to rhyme. From that day on I would sit mesmerized by this precious gifting that I had found words of thought, written in form within worn out leather they were bound. I sat down in darkness of closed window put up the shades so that I could see and I became immersed within the poetry I could hear it softly whispering to me. I could see the words faded with time written right inside of the front cover it was then I saw the gracefulness of the woman I would have called my Mother. Could it have been a special present that she had knowingly left behind with the hopes that sometime, someday one of her daughters just might find? I don't know what led me to the attic or made me find the book of poetry, a mother calling to her daughter... her way of giving a gift to me.... {I truly did find a book of poetry that was hers in the attic as a small girl.... go figure why I would write it now...*grinz*} It's better than I could have planned.. it's made me who I am... {Trace Adkins} [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (11-24-2003 02:04 PM).] |
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Jes Member
since 2003-10-21
Posts 422Denmark |
Not many would know ya thoughts about this, but yes ya right. listen to it its great, smile, thanks I really enjoyed Smile Jes |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I cannot think of a better treasure by which one's life might be measured knowing that the attic would hold something to find, better than gold. ~*~ Keep it close, little one... Your journey is just beginning! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Donna, this poem is a treasure! ~ as are you yourself! Gave me the tingles!  Love, Light, & Poetry!  Linda |
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Kazm Member
since 2003-11-13
Posts 99 |
Your name is right for you, gentle spirit. It is easy to see your face in the poem, and it looks just like your picture. Kaz |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
GS- amazing write and tribute to your Mother. I am sure she was a wonderful person. And I do know where this comes from--this poem touched both my heart and soul. thank you  take care, amy "love is like a butterfly-- |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
OhGentleSpirit~ I love this heart-write ... May become my favorite of your pennings~  *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Bonnie j Senior Member
since 2003-06-27
Posts 1588Ohio |
Love this. It is filled with love. The love jumps out and draws us in. I imagine it was so exciting to have found the beauty your mother had carefully wrapped with love and devotion. And to think it was well hidden in the dark corner of your attic until the time was right for you to discover. Sometime when the time is right share some of words of long ago. Love Bon-Bon  |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
This is an amazing write...of beauty, love and grace....   HUgsssss Lauren~ I had a dream last night |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Thank you all so much. I like to think maybe she knows....and smiles knowing that this child that she last held as just a baby of eighteen months perhaps had followed still somehow in her shoes......Hugs. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh Donna, this is so very touching....a warm moment on a cold day like today |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh my..now how am I to swallow my lunch with this lump in my throat? What a beautiful heart warming piece this is Donna. And, I am sure she knows...oh yes,...she knows. Hugs & luv~ ~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before~ |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Yay! Oh Donna, this is beautiful, sweet friend, what a pleasant suprise that has shaped as part of your golden heart, sweet friend, God Bless You, I'm always blessed to read your wonderful words, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Donna, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
That is a wonderful treasure find! Lovely write too. Deb |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
treasured thoughts nicely depicted...I'd like to suggest the use of past participles instead of gerunds, to me it gives a crisper sound and the action of the line brings the past into the present that the gerund doesn't do..."like a mother called to her daughter". This also fits with the same tense used above, this is just an opinion |
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