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Slow to Die
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Slow to Die |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Slow to Die I watched the blow of slow to die Theses ember of a fires fly It took to wind and land my skin And burned just like a brand of sin And when it raised the red of felt It caused a blister in the welt And brought about a dart of pause Just to peak the sharp of cause. It’s then I knew the reason why It was an ember of a sigh A cry that I had buried deep A cry that caused me lack of sleep. But why the ember burns me now Perhaps a turn of psyches plough And I am at a lose to see Why this burn should bother me. A weeding time, perhaps a clue A vent perhaps, old sorrows spew. |
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Brad Majors 
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
nice |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
A weeding time, perhaps a clue A vent perhaps, old sorrows spew. Oh how we humans get to answer our very own questions....yes? Good morning you rhyming gracious gentleman you! Thank you for the virtue of your words Lovely! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Ah such wonderful words of wisdom you leave for us this frosty morn Sy! Cold and dull here once again today... How about a spot of tea..tis like a ray of sunshine! ~Morning hugs & tea, Nancy~ ~ Let peace begin with me... |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Sy, rub a salve of sweet passion on that welt and watch it heal. Well done. believe in what your heart feels... |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
It's so good to get back to reading you every day... Good morning, and thank you, Sy.... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I watched the blow of slow to die Theses ember of a fires fly It took to wind and land my skin And burned just like a brand of sin And when it raised the red of felt It caused a blister in the welt And brought about a dart of pause Just to peak the sharp of cause. It’s then I knew the reason why It was an ember of a sigh A cry that I had buried deep A cry that caused me lack of sleep. But why the ember burns me now Perhaps a turn of psyches plough And I am at a lose to see Why this burn should bother me. ==================================== Oh Sybabes..this is such an achingly beautiful write...I do so love when Randy fires up your pen.  You know the moth loves this one... slow burn is my specialty. LOL But its the word play and rhyme verbiage along with the depth of expression that makes this one so cool. as to your query .... Why this burn should bother me. somethings never leave us ... somethings never should.  *ww*    I can remember Forever December, |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Sy Isn't it funny how one thing inspires another....You bring that out so poetically but discernable too. Good work....Love that first verse.....The title really sucked me in.... Eric |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Good morning, Sweet Sonneteer! ~ Cleaning our emotional house is not always a fun thing to do ~ but it is often a necessary evil for our ultimate sense of well-being! Make a clean sweep of all that soot! Onward and upward! ~ without the baggage and totally unencumbered!  You have such a fertile imagination! I guess some of the soot from your dying embers helps with your fertility! lol Morning hugs, EA |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Brad Nice is good. LeeJ Thank you for the lovely. Nancy Tea would be a nice ray of sunshine. Hugs scorpio Sounds lke a good idea. LOL Sunshine You are a sweetheart. Hugs JM, You are right all things we encounter become a part of us. WWRS ethome Always a pleasure to have you read and comment. Thank you Earth Angel It's all food for new flowers. LOL hugs |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
A perfect write to wrap my mind around once again Seymour. Strawberry tarts with your tea? Yum Yum. hugs, Chris "At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet." |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
But why the ember burns me now Perhaps a turn of psyches plough And I am at a lose to see Why this burn should bother me. Seymour, it's odd how those old memories when come to mind at the most unexpected times, isn't it? These seems to happen more around the holidays. Happy Holidays, my friend  Ethel |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Chris, Happy holiday sweet and one to sis too. Ethel, That might be true, and happy holiday. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
now this is my kinda write  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
passing, Glad you enjoyed. |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Hello, Sy, I loved your analogies and imagery. It fired back memories of one of our large round bales of hay. It seems that placement of these monsters is very important (if you place them on their sides, or cattywompus, and the hay was put up somewhat wet,spontaneous combustion can take its play). This happened; the firen department put it out, all went well, and the smoke subtly steamed out, with a new fire beginning. After reading your poem and relating to my fire experience, I won't see those big bales quite the same! Sadelite [This message has been edited by Sadelite (12-10-2003 09:35 PM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sadelite Thank you for the interesting comment. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Excellent, excellent writing I liked your references to embers, but you know that embers can so quickly flare into dancing flames. enjoyed reading Liz |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, You are a love, thank you. |
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