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BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

0 posted 2003-12-05 10:53 PM

~*~

The dreamer in me is a fond memory
pulling at my heart strings,
where, oh where is the love.

My chest rises and falls
releasing an assortment of thoughts
staggering through better days
my breath comes in sighs
and I am so tired of crying.

Pieces of the past lie broken
as I step over them to get where I'm going
or where I would like to be
always meaning to sweep them up
another day when the dust settles.

Perhaps when the spring time comes
I will find a better way
something of beauty to tend to and care for
like a flower garden in the shade of the sun
that continues to bloom after the summer is gone.

In the meantime I look for a purpose
a reason to believe in something more than this
holding close to all that is dear to me
rewriting the words I wish to convey.

I've risked it all, and made so many mistakes
but I lack the brevity to step outside of today.
Instead I keep at arms length
to protect the fragility of broken pieces.
In time I shall sort through them
and find a place to keep them out of harms way.

But today, as the cold wind blows across my mind
my heart strays, longing to be warm
yet the frost blurs my vision, stinging my eyes
through another long winter to recall.

~*~

~revised version of the blues~

Brad Majors

Member Elite

since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

1 posted 2003-12-05 10:54 PM

well done

Edder
Senior Member

since 2003-04-02

Posts 671

2 posted 2003-12-05 11:03 PM

there is purpose and reason, all you have to do is believe. yesterday is but a memory, tomorrow is hope...

pictureme
Member

since 2003-11-28

Posts 248
Ohio, USA

3 posted 2003-12-05 11:10 PM

nice flow to this poem...and I see the sunshine ahead! An enjoyable read for me.
pictureme :-)

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2003-12-06 03:16 AM

don't step over the pieces, KICK 'EM!

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

5 posted 2003-12-06 08:35 PM

i like what dixiechick said,
and i can relate,
the winter makes one think too much
stay warm goldengirl....

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

6 posted 2003-12-06 10:45 PM

Thank you for reading me~
This was hardly worth a repost
what can I say, tis the season, after all.

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

7 posted 2003-12-07 01:13 AM

.....psst....next time you post one that is "hardly worth" posting....don't tell me that, cuz I'm bound to like it anyway!

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eringobraugh
Junior Member

since 2003-12-06

Posts 16
Michigan

8 posted 2003-12-07 10:48 AM

The third stanza is memorable. I liked the entire piece and it flows quite well, but the third stanza is special.

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

9 posted 2003-12-07 10:52 AM

Bluesy - you're too darn pretty to let those blue eyes cry those tears. They are blue, are they not? My best to you...

BC

[This message has been edited by Bill Charles (12-07-2003 10:53 AM).]

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

10 posted 2003-12-07 03:50 PM

Lori...Just hugging you...

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

11 posted 2003-12-07 08:26 PM

Like Marti, I'm just hugging you too, Lori......

EagleOne
Member Elite

since 2000-03-07

Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...

12 posted 2003-12-07 08:28 PM

“This was hardly worth a repost”

On that point you are indeed mistaken my friend! From beginning to end this is magnificent, in my humble opinion!

"A spring shower was cause to run
Until you twirled me in the rain" ~ BDC

Aimster
Member Elite

since 2000-02-19

Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC

13 posted 2003-12-10 08:38 PM

Lori,

so glad i went digging around this evening!
this is so powerful...your writing is just
so damn pretty, and your soul even more
beautiful!
happy holidays and best wishes,
amy

"love is like a butterfly--
if you chase it,
it will surely fly away,instead
hold it close and watch it grow into
something beautiful"
~me~

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

14 posted 2003-12-10 08:44 PM

Seems to me
I finally found
where you found
your name...
a wonderful serenade, m'dear...

icequeen
Senior Member

since 2001-12-09

Posts 633
FL USA

15 posted 2003-12-10 08:49 PM

my heart strays, longing to be warm
yet the frost blurs my vision, stinging my eyes

I haven't been able to keep the leash on my heart either, looking for a nice fire to warm it up but it is afraid to step inside and stretch out into the warmth. I'm with you... wait for spring and coddle the flowers "in the shade of the sun". You really do write so beautifully. I'm so impressed with your talent!

Hugs
Caroline

the only man worth your tears will never make you cry

Serena Renae
Junior Member

since 2003-12-04

Posts 48
Ohio, USA

16 posted 2003-12-10 10:20 PM

I very much enjoyed this piece. I was drawn back to a memory in my mind as I was reading. I can relate to this poem completely...well done.
Love,
Serena

icebox
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

17 posted 2003-12-10 11:16 PM

"I've risked it all, and made so many mistakes"

At times, it is the only way to live, to seize the meaning of life. Without risk there is only...age.

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