Open Poetry #30 |
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In Deep Snow |
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the ant Junior Member
since 2003-11-30
Posts 18ca, usa |
I feel cold In this deep snow white all around bloodshed on the ground and to this day I could see the chill the air razor thin mirrors back a time I had once been I drew an arrow from the bobsled the ice turned red crying on my face dead |
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C? Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 190 |
I like the repetition of the image of sharp, metallic things...very ingenious |
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Ratleader![]()
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Crisp and viciously effective language here -- good work! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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