December morning (revised)

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Open Poetry #30

December morning (revised)

Master
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since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

0 posted 2003-12-05 01:23 AM

Black, gray and white, like a daily paper,
carelessly crumpled, and thrown to the street,
the sky was reflected in the cold, puddled pavement.
People stepped on the clouds with negligent feet.

Today, the morning seemed strangely enigmatic.
Snowflakes were scattered on bushes and benches.
Like some lunatic lover, passionate and fanatic,
the wind kissed the downcast faces of strangers.

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passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

1 posted 2003-12-05 03:06 AM

yes...good revision

Masked Intruder

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since 1999-05-23

Posts 1231
Near golden sunsets

2 posted 2003-12-18 08:58 PM

creates such a sad picture.

great metaphors.

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