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the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

0 posted 2003-12-04 04:10 PM

I am growing restless
In my thoughts I am thinking
I can not bring them together
Or straighten them out

If I could straighten them out
then maybe my writing
Wouldn't be so mediocre
So bland
So boring
If only I could straighten my thoughts out

I am so restless
That so of my poetry
Gets off topic
If only I could keep on one thought
Maybe this won't become a habit

Oh the restlessness is ruining
Ruining everything I write
If only I was not restless
Then my writing might be so much better

Cold hands means a warm heart

Brad Majors

Member Elite

since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

1 posted 2003-12-04 04:24 PM

well done!

Jes
Member

since 2003-10-21

Posts 422
Denmark

2 posted 2003-12-04 04:54 PM

I enjoyed this but it also gave me the thought, of if you ever had thought of making poetry inlike 2 dimensional, as if you wrote about restlesness.

restlessness makes us many times think of more than one thing at a time could well be you could write a double poem with that gift.

Smile give it a try

Jes

Ada'doLisdo'ti
Member

since 2002-12-10

Posts 123
California

3 posted 2003-12-04 07:06 PM

restless thats the word to discribes my writting all the time...but it comes out anyway, when you have something to say

The sweetest rose is one you'll die for...

ThunderMage
Senior Member

since 2002-06-20

Posts 812
Canada

4 posted 2003-12-04 07:20 PM

Your poems are always good Julie. This one's no exception to that.

What is life without poetry and adventure?
"Little sister" is just another way of saying "Guardian Angel"!

icequeen
Senior Member

since 2001-12-09

Posts 633
FL USA

5 posted 2003-12-04 07:28 PM

Ahhh I know your place in time too well

I agree with Jes, though - make that restlessness work for you. It is your spirit longing to try something new that makes you restless - indulge it and see what happens!

I like how you explain the feeling though - I can really relate!

Caroline

the only man worth your tears will never make you cry

Ratleader

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since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
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6 posted 2003-12-04 10:11 PM

It's a simple equation....

Restless = Dissatisfied + Growing

It can feel bad, but it's good.

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