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ParisGrl Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 610 |
I look at you and my heart skips a beat You take my breath away I don't know why I feel these feelings for you Maybe you feel them for me too Though I'll never know, I'm to afraid to ask I'll just see you in my dreams again ***Hi everyone! This isn't very well written on my part alot of things are going on right now with me and i just said what I felt....If anyone has any ideas about how to make it better.....please let me know!*** |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
it's from the heart...no one can tell you it's not good or how to make it better...it's what you feel and that is what poetry is! keep on writing! |
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Brad Majors 
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
I like it as is |
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dingusjr Member
since 2003-09-24
Posts 415Missouri |
Tis fine and well writ, Paris Girl! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
hi Laura. . . going with what's in your heart is always good. . .  ---------------------------------------------------------- I am tired . . . |
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