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Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

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of Depression

0 posted 2003-12-03 10:08 AM

Listening to the Lute played by a Monk,  Chun from Shu
by Li Po (701-762)

Direct word translation from the Original Text
(left to right, top to bottom in the English way)

Shu(Szechwan)// Monk//Hold//(Green//Brocade (Famous Lute))

West //down//~Omei*1~//Peak

For//me//One//strum//hand

Like//listen//ten-thousands//valley(s)//pine(s)

Traveler//mind(heart)//Washed(Rinsed)//flowing// water

Remaining //Sound//enter //frost//bell *2

Not//aware (of)//green //mountain//dusk

Autumn//cloud//dark// how-many//layer (s)

*1~ Mount Omei or Emei is a scared peek in the Szechwan Province of China and is the symbol of a sect of Monks, More rounded in everyday life than the more popular known to today’s  public Shaolin. (This takes two symbol position)
*2 ~although referred to as a single bell, there were nine bells in Feng Mountain that rang when the frost comes

Translation Poetic

Szechwan Monk, down the Omei
With Green Brocade Lute playing,
With one pass, thousands of pines swaying,
Travelers, rinsed as if with water flowing
Till the bells tells of the frost coming
Caught entranced with dusk descending
Clouds roll in layers unending
Strings grow still, the mind is free.

Gloom
my poem is just a version of the poem, since translations can vary with the translator as each adds to the original thoughts to make it seem more poetic.

Brad Majors

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since 2001-04-03

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Georgia

1 posted 2003-12-03 12:16 PM

well done

Ladycat

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since 1999-07-05

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At the edge and a doorway,TX

2 posted 2003-12-03 12:20 PM

That is nice.

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Sadelite
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since 2003-10-11

Posts 2519

3 posted 2003-12-03 08:47 PM

Professor,
It was very interesting to see the makings of a translation poem. Truly beautiful. It is good to see another one of your posts! Thank you for sharing.
Sadelite

[This message has been edited by Sadelite (12-03-2003 08:48 PM).]

ecrivan
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since 2001-12-10

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my own state

4 posted 2003-12-03 09:00 PM

Enjoyed the translation

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