Open Poetry #30 |
Rhythm |
Astro Member
since 2003-01-08
Posts 69Ca. |
Rhythm Rhythm? Never had much use for it -- Maybe ‘cause I’m white. I am adept at using simple syllables, But I guess that isn’t right. I should pair words like alliterate With masturbate – sorry, Freudian slip, But the words are multi-syllabic And that makes my rhythm more hip. There’s the speaking voice, too. What I mean is, do I deliver the words With the passion of birds Who sing for the dawn’s red hue? Of course, that’s not the best example As birds are quite simple, and their song Is awkward and random. I should speak more like a jackhammer Whose tandem handles rock and sway With a rhythm that never gives way And I can pound my meaning into The mental ground of a nation weaned on Rhythm. Sight is an always awful beginning |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
ROTFL. This is funny, and has its own unique rhythm. LOL at the humorous alliteration. |
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Masked Intruder
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Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
Another really great write! 'Never had much use for it - Maybe 'cause I'm white' LOL, I can relate to that line so well. I'm a strict free verser, myself, in writing, dancing, and everything else. Midnitesun is very right in noting the humor you use; quite excellently done throughout! -*-*- |
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