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First Snowfall
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First Snowfall |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Stallion clouds: Blacks and roans From westward, Galloping, came With all-gray riders Hanging on, To rolling coach And flowing manes; That blocked, near out The winter sun. * They have come east on the clipper 'cross the prairies and the rivers, Loaded down with heavy burdens Packing counts beyond all numbers; Of white flakes that add to winters, Even drab, a snow-white color. * A billion sequins, falling Light and wind-mixed Glitter shine, a bridal gown With polished silver, In the blue-cold of the morning; Taking 'way what breath I harbor By its deep-chill..by their splendor. * Undefiled, The virgins train Lays spread out on the ground. Her chariot and horses, Having dropped their carried burdens Move now eastward, Loping on. * end |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Ford, this is beautiful |
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PsychoticBunni Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 162Mythical Atlantis |
great word use. so smooth and flowing like horse's hooves. I wonder if those stallions you speak of could be living in assateague undercover??? ;P Meg Meg- And the Texan pushed the Mexican out of the plane and screamed, "Long live the ALAMO!!!!!!!!!" |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
Nice ice, I can see the gray riding in. A very nice mystical touch to a common subject. You gave the subject a personal essence all it's own. Bringing out the gray which also lies in between. A real nice write. Especially this line, for me. "With all-gray riders". poe If nothing is something |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Pefectly descriptive! Winter storm in its essence. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
May I just say.... I LOVE SNOW!!! And...I love this piece. Hugs~ ~ To love and be loved |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Wonderful write! ~ creative and rousing! I love snow ~ and this stirring write about it!   EA |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
ice...you make snow seem un-cold! Great write! |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Ice, I don't see very much snow, living in Florida, but I do love to "see" it through you poets who see it for real. Thank you for painting a picture for my minds eye.  Hugs Ethel "Tomorrow is not so far away. And tonight...we dream of broken walls." by Eric McCarty http://community.webshots.com/user/toniasmom [This message has been edited by garysgirl (11-29-2003 04:14 PM).] |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Never, in 58 years, has the first snowfall been this magnificently beautiful. Thank you for this masterpiece. Hugs, Marti 'You cannot shake hands with a clenched fist.' |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Joy is connecting to your e-mail box and finding nine notification/replies to a poem you were not sure would fly....:-) Passing shadows....Thank you, It is nature that is "beautiful" I am glad you think I captured a bit of it in this poem.....:-) Bunni I think the same Stallions visit there sometimes...thank you for the nice comment..... :-) Poe The "personal essence" of the poem is here because this write was a personal experience. Of course the people with me did not see the horses because they did not see the world through a poets eyes. Thanks for your reply.... :-) icebox I guess that that is a poets objective, to distill the world to its finest essence...a wonderful compliment, thank you...... :-) Enchantress I love the way you use the word love so freely.. and the way you ended the comment with "hugs" I am glad you loved the piece...:-) Earth Angel Another snow lover....:-) Thank you for being stirred.... :-) Martie Welcome back, and thanks for the kind reply..... :-) Garysgirl Thank you for absorbing my picture into your "minds eye" .....:-) NewEnglandlazurlu We are about the same age, it seems. There have been many first snow falls, but this one came in on an Alberta Clipper like a heard of wild horses, and deserved to be written about .....Thank you for reading......:-) btw, I am an admirer of Gandhi, nice to see the quote on your reply... "An eye for an eye makes the whole world blind" M.K.Gandhi |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Scintillating -- leave it to ice, to capture ice! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Ford, I love the snow every once in a while, howeer here in Colorado it is a desert and we have had an intense drought in the past decade! (smiles) Still we get the occasional accumulation, God Bless You, I love this, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you But if the bright lights don't receive you You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20 [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (12-01-2003 11:29 PM).] |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Ford Thank you for allowing me to see through your words what it is like to see the first of Winter's snow appear. I have never and probably will never experience that, living here in Melbourne, Australia. We have snow in some parts in Winter but we have to travel more than three hours to get there. Take care.......sue I am in motion |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Love this! And galloping storms too! Enjoyable write, thank you. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I love your beautiful imagery. ... and I love snow! Love, Margherita  |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Ratleader.. Thank you for reading and the poetic comment...:-) * M.A. Alaways nice to see your coments...They make me feel warm....:-) * Suetang The pleasure of "allowing" is all mine...:-) I don't have to travel at all to see "it" now is laying heavy, just beyond my door...Thank you for commenting..... * Krawdad Thank you for reading and commenting...:-) * Margherita Love your comments.....:-) * Thanks, again to all.... _______ice ><> |
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