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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows 
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There's no time like the present, wrapped around the razor's edge of reason, to soak in life's steeped waters resenting my mortality and the need to see things through. I am not you, we have no doubt argued that point bedazzled and belabored until it be forever blunted on the simple rocks of logic's truth, nor would I ever want to be you carrying each season as a raft of obligations; each life is just a way station where many paths can cross and all paths lead away and all paths bend around and back one day; five decades after leaving home it's still the only place I haven't gone and found, or built from karmic boards left lying ‘round, or stones of my lives' guilt; three steps forward some steps back, trying to remind my soul that it could fly, it's the humanity I lack that lets me watch, dispassionate, as those around me die; many heroes I have known, men and women who have shown me how in images so crisp and clean, so perfectly undone, to face whatever is the greatest fear and not stand down. I like to think I've done the same, yet the game whether lost or won is only scored by the survivors who, by living, have invested in illusion. ©2003 by icebox |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Love the last line "yet the game whether lost or won is only scored by the survivors who, by living, have invested in illusion. " How bitingly true. |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
i am once again wow'd by you !! snow "...why does my skeleton pursue me |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Writing down to the bones... |
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pictureme Member
since 2003-11-28
Posts 248Ohio, USA |
Hello icebox, First I am new to the site and most of the poetry sites I have found have little or no activity. This one however, is amazing! I have read some of your poems and I am impressed with your work. The way the poem begins.....the body...and than the ending all leave me illusioned! Many thoughts were awakened in me thinking about the game of life and how we play we! You seem to bring wisdom into your poetry! pictureme :-) |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I'd like to think I've done the same too *sigh* |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Both truth and illusion have a way of making me feel bad and good at the same time, makes me feel relaxed and nervous at the same time...I like poems that are dualistic in that sense....this is one of them. _______ice ><> |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
You took my early morning reflections of past transgressions and errors of judgement in quite another direction with this piece. Thanks... Superb writing. Patricia |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
icebox I think you took this one out of the freezer. LOL Enjoyed |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
icebox "many heroes I have known, men and women who have shown me how in images so crisp and clean, so perfectly undone, to face whatever is the greatest fear and not stand down. I like to think I've done the same," Yes, I think you have! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Bowing humbly Sir... You have written an incredible poem. One that so many can relate heavily to... Thanx Icebox.... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
are you quite sure you're not me? smiling. You continue to educate me, m'friend. I tip my hat to you. |
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