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Once Born Alone
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Once Born Alone |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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To find the winsome heart wandering, following the flow of water’s ebb. As curves twist the meandering below the spider’s silken web. Take from me the ache of soul, the pine of that which churns. Hear from me the calling, before the fire of my passion burns. For in the light of crystal bright a glimmer brings to gleam a waking sight of dreamer’s flight above the water’s stream... And whence the walk is taken upon the smoothest of stone asleep, one then reborn awakens to breath as two entwined... not one asleep, alone... |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
asleep, one then reborn awakens to breath as two entwined... not one asleep, alone... Magnus dear friend, this is so soft to read and take in. Lovely. Chris  "At one glance |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"And whence the walk is taken upon the smoothest of stone asleep, one then reborn awakens to breath as two entwined... not one asleep, alone..." Breathless romance Barry...you write it like no one else. Enjoyed...  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh my.....Oh *SIGH* Wonderful Barry....melted some of the ice in Canada.  ~Smiles and warm hugs~ In the midst of winter.. |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
*sigh* just beautiful its so.. so, I don't know... romantic, loving, deep. I can't seem to find the word. But, it is... Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
"As curves twist the meandering below the spider’s silken web." great phrase...to go with a great write. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Barry, Well you got all the girls sighing. Well done my friend. |
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Ravenwolfvoyager Member
since 2003-12-25
Posts 326 |
Wonderful work Barry!! An awesome write!! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Barry "to breath as two entwined... not one asleep, alone..." and this is how love should be! You are so very Barry! |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Barry - very well done - you say it so very well - Paul |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this is precious |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"For in the light of crystal bright a glimmer brings to gleam a waking sight of dreamer’s flight above the water’s stream..." Barry~ This was seamless. It flowed through me.  "sit on top of the world and tell me how you feel...'cause what you feel is what I feel for you.." |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
Beautiful, just beautiful! SG |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
to breath as two entwined... not one asleep, alone..."" romance at its finest, you do this with such grace, it is always a pleasure to read you! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
You use all my favorite words in this one, and got my heart all fluttery, too. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Laoha Member
since 2003-03-07
Posts 161Nevada, USA |
enjoyed! |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
This is a spellbinding write, in true Magnus fashion. I am always impressed with the tenderness you convey in your works. TD |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Take from me the ache of soul, the pine of that which churns. Hear from me the calling, before the fire of my passion burns. I felt this one down deep where I sometimes fear to go... A fine piece of writing, Barry...very fine indeed. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"And whence the walk is taken upon the smoothest of stone asleep, one then reborn awakens to breath as two entwined... not one asleep, alone..." Wonderful lines, these! |
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