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suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

0 posted 2004-01-22 06:10 PM

I'll cry later
A tear duct draining deluge
Will gush forth unchecked
Through shattered dam
Until my heart shrivels to nothing
In its bath of brine

But not now

Though this moment's the when
Unshed tears trickle
Down my throat - acid rain
Falling only inside
As my soul pleads
For later to arrive.

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

1 posted 2004-01-22 06:13 PM

Oh goodness, suthern, this made a lump come in my throat.
Sometimes the tears bring needed release. It hurts
so bad to need to cry and not be able too.
Heart hugs, my friend

Ethel

muted

Member Elite

since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

2 posted 2004-01-22 06:14 PM

..."acid rain"...i like that analogy

..like tears that are held are eroding the soul..

...it aches to read this..

*hugs*
~Dawn

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

3 posted 2004-01-22 06:28 PM

garysgirl: Yes, it does. *S* Thank you so much, kind lady! *S*

muted: Then the moment was conveyed. *S* Thank you very much! *S*

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

4 posted 2004-01-22 06:59 PM

suthern...I've stored up tears in my life and understand this too well. Hugs to you and a wish for things to get better.

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

5 posted 2004-01-22 07:02 PM

Wow! I know the ache of unshed tears..
and you have described the feeling well.
~Heart hugs~

In the midst of winter..
I found there lives within me,
an invincible summer.

Essential Distress
Junior Member

since 2004-01-22

Posts 33

6 posted 2004-01-22 07:31 PM

yeah. perfect imagery...

touching expression...

uber impressive.

Unseamedsoul
Junior Member

since 2004-01-22

Posts 11
Rowesville , S.C.

7 posted 2004-01-22 07:39 PM

....I don't know what to say except that it's great...

There's a crack inside this heart
Something that will never be healed ,
I can't give anything to anyone
Cause this whole will never be filled !!

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

8 posted 2004-01-22 08:20 PM

What Ethel said, release your tears sweet suthern.

I'm so sorry for your saddness~

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

9 posted 2004-01-22 08:39 PM

suthern
Brine is a most common element. Well done.

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

10 posted 2004-01-22 09:04 PM

Aww..Ruth.....this is so sad. Cheer up my friend. hugs, Chris

"At one glance
I love you
With a thousand hearts."

— Mihri Hatun, Turkish poet

Ravenwolfvoyager
Member

since 2003-12-25

Posts 326

11 posted 2004-01-22 10:19 PM

A wonderful write Suthern. You leave me needing more each time I read you.

LngJhnAg
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since 1999-07-23

Posts 3508
Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion

12 posted 2004-01-22 10:37 PM

Ruth - If you need to get something off your chest, just give me a call.

Ratleader

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since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

13 posted 2004-01-23 12:23 PM

Probably a fool's errand to try, but I wish I could cheer you up, wave my magic wand over you and make it better.... Sometimes things aren't as bad as you think they are, and I hope this is one of those times.

Meanwhile, I'll just say this poem truly moved me, Laura. Happy or sad, you are good!

~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº>
______________Ratleader______________

Voiceless
Senior Member

since 2001-02-19

Posts 686
Under the stars upon the wind

14 posted 2004-01-23 12:29 PM

So true on so many levels.
Thank you for sharing.
~Jen

Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial)

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

15 posted 2004-01-23 02:02 AM

you always touch deeply

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

16 posted 2004-01-23 09:58 AM

I know this moment. I know this promise. Well done-you bring it back with all the feelings. You don't oversell it or understate it.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

17 posted 2004-01-23 12:23 PM

SweetSuthernSoul~
So poignantly you touch so many~
Sending a bushel of heartfelt your way~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

[email protected]

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

18 posted 2004-01-23 12:36 PM

Great flow of emotion...powerful write...thank you being so candid

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

19 posted 2004-01-23 01:27 PM

A tear duct draining deluge
============================

you knew you had me with that line...

you just poetically defined bleeding out ones eyes.

Painfully poignant write poetess Ruthie..
I would wish that you/we can make a new promise to write a happy ending..but I know its just not that easy.

How foolish must man be, not to be impressed by mountains and trees
not to be brought to his knees by the beauty of the sky and sea

Cherokee Lore

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

20 posted 2004-01-23 01:29 PM

Well hon, you are not alone...Perhaps, we should cry together...aw hugs hon!

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

21 posted 2004-01-23 02:34 PM

Martie & Enchantress: It's an ache I wouldn't wish on anyone. *S* Thank you so much! *S*

Essential Distress & Unseamedsoul: Thank you both so very much... I appreciate your comments. And welcome to Passions! *S*

Blues: Head for high ground then, gal! LOL Thank you so much! *S*

Seymour: Around me it is! *G* Thank you, my friend. *S*

Nightshade, Voiceless & PS: Thank you so very much for reading me through such kind eyes. *S*

Ravenwolfvoyager: That ranks with the greatest compliments I've ever received... I thank you so very much! *S*

LJA: ROFL... ya ole scalawag... *S* I do adore you... and I thank you. *S*

Ratleader: It's never a fool's errand to care, my friend. *S* Thank you so much... to have the best approve moves ME! *S*

Pilgrimage: Having the poem work is the silver lining to the knowing. *S* Thank you!

Marge: All hugs gladly accepted, my friend. Thank you so much! *S*

steavenr: Thank you for liking! *S*

JM: We don't "do" fiction. LOL Thank you so much... glad you like! **S

GS: The ocean levels would rise then! *S* Thank you so much, kind lady!

[This message has been edited by suthern (01-24-2004 01:46 PM).]

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

22 posted 2004-01-24 06:12 PM

(big angel hugs) This is so deeply heartfelt, dearest friend, don't keep the tears in too long as that can only enhance the sores, God Bless You, let it out softly, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Suthern, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

gadfly4you
Junior Member

since 2004-01-24

Posts 37

23 posted 2004-01-25 12:27 PM

I relate all too well, as I see many others have......I think that says it all....wonderful....Thank you

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

24 posted 2004-01-26 03:59 PM

M'toe: Thank you so much, my friend... your kindness is appreciated. *S*

gadfly4you: Thank you very much! *S* And welcome to Passions! *S*

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