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Open Poetry #30

A Sense of Smell

MexicoCityBlues
Junior Member

since 2004-01-04

Posts 48
The Point of Know Return

0 posted 2004-01-21 06:50 PM

I looked at myself
Mirror panting
She stood me up
And watched me fall

And when I hit the earth
I burst
Melting into melting into melting silver
Seeping through the snake hole

Throw the Tundra in a blender
Spin it around till galaxies
Produce their friction
Rubbing together like chains

I lost myself
Where could I be?
“Not here”
announced the fog

through the snake hole I fall
took the pill that makes you swallow
I unearthed pyramids
Beneath the surface

Society ate me
And I fell again
She burned me
And I died again.

"The story of life is quicker than the wink of an eye. The story of love is Hello and Goodbye. Until we meet again..." -Jimi Hendrix

DavePage
Member Elite

since 2003-12-21

Posts 2917

1 posted 2004-01-21 07:28 PM

You dont die
You merely go through a hell that you remember 40 years later

Lying and screaming on a floor whilst people who care look at the ceiling, suck their teeth and complain about "what would the neighbours think"

You close the scars and you treat them as closed

Dave

Justbleu
Member Elite

since 1999-08-31

Posts 3329
Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)

2 posted 2004-01-21 08:29 PM

Interesting and strong images!!!!
I like the way you manipulate words!!!!
Nicely done!!!!
Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

J.Samm
Member

since 2004-01-12

Posts 415
Iloilo City, Philippines

3 posted 2004-01-21 08:53 PM

well done! truly, we can get smothered when we are obliged to conform against our desires. i like this part best--

"Society ate me
And I fell again
She burned me
And I died again."

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