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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought 
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Somebodies love song Was lost in the wind, Caught in the trees, And faded, By dim Tints Of M o o n l i g h t . He was a man of sorrows ...I am a girl of tears. [This message has been edited by GG (01-20-2004 03:31 PM).] |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
love this! love this! .....did i mention i loved this! beautiful little gem of a poem! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
great piece...you know what I thought when I looked at it though...? it would be cool to see moonlight done like this...like a tail of a kite...whatyathink? m o o n l i g h t |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
GG -- this was a marvel! hugs....jo |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
muted, lol so do you love it? I'm honored! Thank you much  Dix, you're a genious! I'm gonna change it  loveyailiana, thank you! I'm glad you think so Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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Kristin Eve Member
since 2004-01-13
Posts 89On, Canada |
i disagree... I think the direction of this poem is PERFECT as it is... and i LOVE it. Beautiful beautiful work! "By the time you finish reading this... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
either way was great! I just had a vision and wanted to share it...I love it both ways! awesome stuff! I love you too, girl  |
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Kristin Eve Member
since 2004-01-13
Posts 89On, Canada |
oh. i guess i should exlplain WHY i like it... hehe... It reminds me of a large funnel. Like the song was once so arduous and amplified... but slowly, as the melody went unheard, each passing note broke alone and independantly fell to the ground in sounds of sighs instead of thunderous, passionate song. i think it's absolutely exquisite just the way it is. "By the time you finish reading this... |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Kirstin, the way it is now is from the what Dix said, before I just had moonlight on one line. I liked her idea too... I'm glad you like it! Thanks for both replies!Dix, glad you did thank you...  He was a man of sorrows |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Beautiful!! enjoyed it very, very much Charisma |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
Great job with this, very enjoyable read for this morning, thank you Brian Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
OhAlyssa~ Not only are the word-thoughts totally creative ... the 'suggested' formatting is IMPRESSIVE as well~ That little DixieDoodle has an eye for style, doesn't she ?  This is one CLASSY PIECE~  *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, the spirit rejoices over what it has left. - Sufi epigram <))>< [email protected] |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Charisma, Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it and replied... Brian, thank you sir! good morning, or uh evening now, to you. Glad you liked it.Marge, she sure does! Thanks for your kind reply, you're always so sweet.Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
GG, This was excellent by one and tremendous by two. I liked the way you and Dixie played with this! Either way, it is great! Take care... Sadie |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Cathy, aww wow I didn't expect to see this back up again. Thank you so much for the reply! Take care... Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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