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Born with and tested
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Born with and tested |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia 
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There’s something born within us all, within the minds own core That tells us even when fulfilled we want that little more There’s something within passion’s lust that drives us near insane But even when we get its fill, we search for it again Something guides the human that a creature would ignore The niceties, the law’s own right, the way of those before For animals would feed their need without a thought at all Where we might ponder daydreams and the moments of recall We’re judged and we are looked at, examined and assessed Put within a memory but unknowing of the test We’re individuals, us all and different in some way The modern day breed human being who’s tested everyday If we were all alone without the judgement of our peers Would it change the way we act and live throughout our years? Or was there something stamped within, a birthmark none can see That somehow guides us on our way to where we all should be We’re individuals us all, but common threads exist That we all need, that we all want, the things we can’t resist Society creates it and we fall in its wake As individuals unite and grave mistakes we make One man is not the King of men, or woman Queen of all We’re lucky just to make a mark that someone might recall And generations will go on till life on earth does end Then only Gods can let us plea as actions we defend We’re people doing what we can through moments of each day Trying just to do our best and go along our way People with emotions, with wants and pleas of hope Lucky to have one true friend and lucky we could cope |
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McLean Member
since 2004-01-05
Posts 484state of marital bliss |
One man is not the King of men, or woman Queen of all We’re lucky just to make a mark that someone might recall And generations will go on till life on earth does end Then only Gods can let us plea as actions we defend I like the way this sounds coupled together. Very deep poem for me this morning, dear, and very good. Chewey is what I will call it, becuase it is one I will be reading on and off all day, probably. We are, indeed, a wanting creature, and you have described it well here. Enjoyed the thought you put into your word selections! McLean |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
McLean, it is lovely to have you replying. Human thoughts; in one way or the other we are all the same; all trying to live our lives as well as we can. Great to have you visit; here it is night time 11.30pm Sunday. I hope you have a great day. Take care my friend. Sincerely Rick |
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Michelle_loves_Mike
since 2003-12-20
Posts 1189Pennsylvania |
We’re judged and we are looked at, examined and assessed Put within a memory but unknowing of the test We’re individuals, us all and different in some way The modern day breed human being who’s tested everyday Rick,,,,,goodness knows we are judged, sentenced, executed, and forgotten a thousand times a day,,,for the way we dress, what we eat, who we know, beliefs,,,the list is endless,,, I love the way you weave it all together,,,yes, we are all different, but with a basic similarity of needs and desires All very well put Take care Michelle I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Rick This was an outstanding piece of writing and one which many people should read. Your words of wisdom always shine like a beacon in the night and I get so much out of reading your words. You truly are an inspiration, my friend. "We are empowered by sharing our deepest self with another person, offering him or her our heart, our soul, our life" Take care........Sue I am in motion |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Enjoyed ....  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
most incredible! an awesome write!  |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Hi Michelle, thanks for this great reply, it was so lovely to hear from you my friend, very much appreciated. Dear Sue, you have empowered me by sharing this reply, always great to see you visit, thanks for the comment, they are always so positive and looked forward to. iliana, I am so happy you enjoyed, thanks for sharing your thought. Dear Dixie, again you visit and again I am happy that you had, thanks for your comment, very much appreciated. To you all again, thank you so much, you are all good friends who I hold to dear. Sincerely Rick |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"If we were all alone without the judgement of our peers Would it change the way we act and live throughout our years? Or was there something stamped within, a birthmark none can see That somehow guides us on our way to where we all should be" Excellent, Rick! I loved your sentiments, questions and pondering in this piece. Many a thought like this goes swirling around in my mind. You've captured this wonderfully. Well done in form and content!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Dear Kit, from you this comment means so much, you are such a master, thankyou for this visit and wonderful words, appreciated. Sincerely Rick |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Lucky to have one true friend, blessed, a treasure to have such a friend~ So much truth and wisdom I find in your words of poetry~ ~ARH   Open your eyes, open your mind, open your heart, let me come in and show you love.....~ARH |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
A keeper that is going right into my library. I am so glad that voice told me to pick this one to read at this moment. You put so much into perspective for me. It seems I have been going through the exam of my life this last month and then pulling the poor pitiful me routine. Rick, this is one of your best, if not the best. Patricia |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
ARH, one true friend, you would not think that would be too much to have, but at times even one is hard to find, thanks once again for your reply my friend, very much appreciated. Patricia, I hope all goes well for you, thank you for this wonderful reply, I am so glad in some way I was able to put things into perspective, great to hear from you, take care and be well. To you both my friends, again thankyou, each time you reply it brings a smile to my heart. Sincerely Rick |
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