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Martie
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0 posted 2004-01-17 11:38 AM


   The Walk with Clock

Tender torn our feet all walk this path
For the street is dense but made of glass
And how it shatters if you trip and fall
It breaks like speed bumps on a freeway fast

Alone each moves along times fragile dock
With time though blurred veracious and so steady
If you jump it waits just up the road
With its magic pocket opening ready

Ease me over the rim of this feared place
Bring me the grace to read your open face
Don’t try to hold my youth within your arms
truth tells me that a lie is so embraced

Lover take me in your sweet delay
Usurp the movement forward to that place
Let me steady be in tide that takes
Each grain of sand to sea without a trace
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1-24-02

I am just a traveler looking for a home, finding I carry it around with me, and sometimes it's just too heavy.

© Copyright 2004 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-01-17 11:39 AM


Oh Martie! this is exceptional! I wish we were voting for inclusion in a book as this would be perfect!
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2 posted 2004-01-17 11:46 AM


Martie
As lovely as lovely can be.

Sunshine
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3 posted 2004-01-17 11:47 AM


Thanks again for this, Martie...
you can never give us enough, y'know.

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4 posted 2004-01-17 12:00 PM


Lover take me in your sweet delay
Usurp the movement forward to that place
Let me steady be in tide that takes
Each grain of sand to sea without a trace



Such beauty you write, dear Martie.  

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5 posted 2004-01-17 12:57 PM


I love to read you when I'm feeling blue...
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6 posted 2004-01-17 01:06 PM


"Ease me over the rim of this feared place
Bring me the grace to read your open face
Don’t try to hold my youth within your arms
truth tells me that a lie is so embraced "

I pray for this as well.  (Beautifully written!)

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7 posted 2004-01-17 01:10 PM


Hi Martie,
I am glad I found this poem, it is lovely and again fine writing, I have no critique on any part of it.
thanks for sharing
Richard.

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8 posted 2004-01-17 01:12 PM


Beautiful sweet Martie..
gee, I wish I could write like this!
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

    In the midst of winter..
I found there lives within me,
    an invincible summer.

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9 posted 2004-01-17 01:22 PM


Martie - if I could write like this they would call me a poet and you are an exceptional one - this is just amazing - Paul
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10 posted 2004-01-17 03:35 PM




(smiles) Yay! Awwwwwwww, I love the fanciful imagery in this, sweet friend, God Bless You and may eternity be an invisible clock that always chimes in your heart with blessings! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

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11 posted 2004-01-17 03:39 PM


"Lover take me in your sweet delay
Usurp the movement forward to that place
Let me steady be in tide that takes
Each grain of sand to sea without a trace"

There are times when you really rock my soul.

This is one of those times.




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12 posted 2004-01-17 04:41 PM


Sis~
*****Hi Sister *****
YIKES ... didn't realize I had forgotten to log out after I posted ~Warrior's~ poem ... soooooooo, ya' know what ??? ... I think maybe he was thinking of us BOTH~

Thank you for this share~

'Don’t try to hold my youth within your arms
truth tells me that a lie is so embraced

Lover take me in your sweet delay
Usurp the movement forward to that place
Let me steady be in tide that takes
Each grain of sand to sea without a trace'


PRECIOUS ... PRECIOUS~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~



[This message has been edited by soaring eagle (01-18-2004 11:42 AM).]

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13 posted 2004-01-18 11:34 AM


Your eyes see beyond what is there, into what may be, could someday come to be, and always deeply into what should be.

Thank you for this vision, clearly written with a loving hand for someone luckier than anyone deserves to be.

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14 posted 2004-01-18 01:26 PM


Touchingly beautiful, dear Martie.

Let me steady be in tide that takes
Each grain of sand to sea without a trace


Love, Margherita

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15 posted 2004-01-29 10:37 PM


Martie,

   What a lovely poem, astutely following the theme of time throughout the poem in many colorful ways.   You are a very talented poetess!   I enjoyed this a lot and probably will check this one out periodically.
              ~Sadelite~

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