Open Poetry #30 |
Wooden Soldiers |
inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
Words are losing definition worn and reduntant as the stamped on trees in this too bleak winter stilllife echos of eachother, stiff as wooden soldiers, one upon the other diminishing in the distance falling like dominos, they erase now, my eyes become brushes painting the empty branches, with the overflow of sundowns colors before they stetch over the nighttime horizon,locked away in the artist's box safe until morning, i empty and fill in the same blank spaces over and over again, tired wallpaper waiting for something that hasn't yet come, meantime time moves |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Gah, you're just amazing! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
yes..time moves.. and the colors we paint are sometimes always locked away..the scenes.. only ones we see the numbers to pain by.. nicely done.. I enjoyed |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Profound and beautiful. The awareness of the passing time is a melancholic note ... but you fill the waiting time with beauty, which acts as a magnet for what you are waiting for ... Love and hugs. Margherita |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
my eyes become brushes painting the empty branches, with the overflow of sundowns colors before they stetch over the nighttime horizon,locked away in the artist's box safe until morning, Michele, this is so beautiful. Your writing gets better and better..... and it was already excellent!! Hugs Ethel |
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bklynboy Senior Member
since 2002-12-15
Posts 660florida |
Another terrific job. You are an artist with words! |
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Ravenwolfvoyager Member
since 2003-12-25
Posts 326 |
Bravo, you commend to your name very well as the inkgoddess for you truly are. Wonderful write. Thank you |
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marcel Senior Member
since 2003-03-02
Posts 660az, usa |
beautifully painted picture! |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
This is so pretty Inked one. There is a sadness and a longing ever present, and you give it life and release it so gracefully to us. TD |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
"my eyes become brushes I could have picked any phrase or verse, so many poignant threads to pull on here...Such passion in your longings and longings in your passions, you render the moving moment, passing time, beautifully ~C |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"i empty and fill in the same blank spaces over and over again, tired wallpaper waiting for something that hasn't yet come, meantime time moves" I agree....hard to choose. "sit on top of the world and tell me how you feel...'cause what you feel is what I feel for you.." |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Wow !! |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
In words of the well-spoken Meg .... GAH!!!! It's said time is a circle, it is only fitting that we get dizzy now and then! enjoyed the painting. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Inke -- this was so creative -- I really enjoyed it! |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Excellent poetry inky...:-) I am especially captivated right here> "my eyes become brushes painting the empty branches, with the overflow of sundowns colors before they stetch over the nighttime horizon...." enjoyed.... _______ice ><> |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very touching you move me |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
thanks kids, so glad to move you love and peace,michele |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
in this too bleak winter stilllife echos of eachother, stiff as wooden soldiers, one upon the other diminishing in the distance falling like dominos, they erase now, What an image your words paint! This is absolutely brilliant, Michele~ |
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