»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #30
»
Archaic Smile
| Open Poetry #30 |
|
Archaic Smile |
|
Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(Here is my "farewell love song" of this year to someone who used to love me until New Years Day 2003 and still her vision is part of my heart! I wrote it on piano!  and  )Archaic Smile By: Noah Eaton 12/31/03 Your eyes are radiating deep inside, Like carnotite, I go blind Little echo inside, go to sleep, Rest at ease, Honestly, You’re the rose that blooms at sight of dawn Shimmering in the Tuscan garden sun Dissolving colors as the seasons wile Archaic Smile Your inner-light I cannot estimate, You’re upside-down cake, Fruit and parfait The pitchblende is now buried inside me, Which I cannot see, These even wilder things, It’s Holocene You’re the rose that blooms at sight of dawn Shimmering in the Tuscan garden sun Dissolving colors as the seasons wile Archaic Smile If I ever forget your eyes, That pilot light Will be burning bright I hope you’ll find a yellow dove, Who can take you high above Prism castles we could never dream of You’re the rose that blooms at sight of dawn Shimmering in the Tuscan garden sun Dissolving colors as the seasons wile Archaic Smile Your statue within my heart’s still stands Your smile one of a kind, That others have yet to find Can a hundred years replicate, This swan song we create, Either way, I’m not afraid Either way, I’m not afraid... "You'll find something that's enough to keep you But if the bright lights don't receive you You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20 |
||
| © Copyright 2004 Nadia Lockheart - All Rights Reserved | |||
skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
VERY powerful, Noah!  ~sky Hold on, if you feel like letting go |
||
|
wordwizard Member
since 2003-09-08
Posts 483on the way to next world |
a moving write Noah, Happy New year to you  |
||
|
Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sometimes the best place for love to live, is in our memory. Stunning tribute. Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
||
|
Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"Your smile one of a kind, That others have yet to find" This was very beautiful, Noah. Lovely sentiments throughout, and your replication of "Either way ... I'm not afraid" in closing, brings home the feeling of one who is strong yet still shows a vulnerability. Well done! Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
||
|
chrissydome Member
since 2003-11-28
Posts 73germany |
it's beautiful! is it possible to hear the piano-version? turning mirrors upside down won't make dust fall off the ground, hiding wounds won't ease the pain, sleep won't make you whole again... |
||
|
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Your words paint wonderful pictures, Noah. I enjoyed this very much! |
||
|
Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very powerful write Noah. Be strong...you will love again. Hugs...your sidekick. In the midst of winter.. |
||
|
suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is just beautiful... melodic even without the music. *S* |
||
|
McLean Member
since 2004-01-05
Posts 484state of marital bliss |
Come now...can real love die on a particular day? You have such amazing comments to everyone in this forum, I find it hard to believe you haven't found a reflection in someone special. This poem is very sweet, though sad, and shows a heart that is understanding and kind. I can't wait to read your "welcoming love poem"!!! McLean |
||
|
McLean Member
since 2004-01-05
Posts 484state of marital bliss |
Oh...and I forgot what grabbed me to read this in the first place...FANTASTIC TITLE! What a great combination is "archaic smile". |
||
|
iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"You’re the rose that blooms at sight of dawn Shimmering in the Tuscan garden sun Dissolving colors as the seasons wile Archaic Smile" Mistletoe, this was lovely and really sweet. I hope someday we get to hear your words with the music that accompanies them. |
||
|
A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Beautiful song Noah..I am there too.... hugs to your heart! from one hurt heart to another! ~ARH Open your eyes, open your mind, open your heart, let me come in and show you love.....~ARH |
||
|
ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Noah Oh! I do like the refreshement of this language....thank you for filling my cup _______ice ><> |
||
|
scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Strong write Noah. You have strength mixing with your pain. You will love again. believe in what your heart feels... |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
