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Mistletoe Angel
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0 posted 2004-01-07 11:42 PM


(Here is my "farewell love song" of this year to someone who used to love me until New Years Day 2003 and still her vision is part of my heart! I wrote it on piano! and )

Archaic Smile
By: Noah Eaton
12/31/03

Your eyes are radiating deep inside,
Like carnotite,
I go blind
Little echo inside, go to sleep,
Rest at ease,
Honestly,

You’re the rose that blooms at sight of dawn
Shimmering in the Tuscan garden sun
Dissolving colors as the seasons wile
Archaic Smile

Your inner-light I cannot estimate,
You’re upside-down cake,
Fruit and parfait
The pitchblende is now buried inside me,
Which I cannot see,
These even wilder things,
It’s Holocene

You’re the rose that blooms at sight of dawn
Shimmering in the Tuscan garden sun
Dissolving colors as the seasons wile
Archaic Smile

If I ever forget your eyes,
That pilot light
Will be burning bright
I hope you’ll find a yellow dove,
Who can take you high above
Prism castles we could never dream of

You’re the rose that blooms at sight of dawn
Shimmering in the Tuscan garden sun
Dissolving colors as the seasons wile
Archaic Smile

Your statue within my heart’s still stands
Your smile one of a kind,
That others have yet to find
Can a hundred years replicate,
This swan song we create,
Either way,
I’m not afraid

Either way,
I’m not afraid...



"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

© Copyright 2004 Nadia Lockheart - All Rights Reserved
skyshine
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1 posted 2004-01-08 12:03 PM


VERY powerful, Noah!

~sky

Hold on, if you feel like letting go
Hold on, it gets better than you know....
~Good Charlotte

wordwizard
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2 posted 2004-01-08 03:44 AM


a moving write Noah, Happy New year to you


Kethry
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3 posted 2004-01-08 05:26 AM


Sometimes the best place for love to live, is in our memory. Stunning tribute.

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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4 posted 2004-01-08 07:21 AM


"Your smile one of a kind,
That others have yet to find"

This was very beautiful, Noah. Lovely sentiments throughout, and your replication of "Either way ... I'm not afraid" in closing, brings home the feeling of one who is strong yet still shows a vulnerability.  Well done!

Best wishes and hugs,
/Kit

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germany
5 posted 2004-01-08 08:46 AM


it's beautiful! is it possible to hear the piano-version?

turning mirrors upside down won't make dust fall off the ground, hiding wounds won't ease the pain, sleep won't make you whole again...

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6 posted 2004-01-08 09:15 AM



Your words paint wonderful pictures, Noah.  I enjoyed this very much!

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7 posted 2004-01-08 09:18 AM


Very powerful write Noah.
Be strong...you will love again.
Hugs...your sidekick.

    In the midst of winter..
I found there lives within me,
    an invincible summer.

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8 posted 2004-01-09 04:37 PM


This is just beautiful... melodic even without the music. *S*
McLean
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9 posted 2004-01-10 11:46 PM


Come now...can real love die on a particular day?  You have such amazing comments to everyone in this forum, I find it hard to believe you haven't found a reflection in someone special.  This poem is very sweet, though sad, and shows a heart that is understanding and kind.  I can't wait to read your "welcoming love poem"!!!  

McLean

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10 posted 2004-01-10 11:47 PM


Oh...and I forgot what grabbed me to read this in the first place...FANTASTIC TITLE!  What a great combination is "archaic smile".
iliana
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11 posted 2004-01-11 12:28 PM


"You’re the rose that blooms at sight of dawn
Shimmering in the Tuscan garden sun
Dissolving colors as the seasons wile
Archaic Smile"

Mistletoe, this was lovely and really sweet.  I hope someday we get to hear your words with the music that accompanies them.  

A Romantic Heart
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12 posted 2004-01-11 02:26 AM


Beautiful song Noah..I am there too....
hugs to your heart!
from one hurt heart to another!

~ARH

Open your eyes, open your mind, open your heart, let me come in and show you love.....~ARH

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13 posted 2004-01-11 07:28 AM


Noah
Oh! I do like the refreshement of this language....thank you for filling my cup
_______ice
  ><>

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14 posted 2004-01-11 09:42 AM


Strong write Noah.  You have strength mixing with your pain.  You will love again.

believe in what your heart feels...

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