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Obscurity
Member

since 2003-12-04

Posts 153
In A Melancholic Dream

0 posted 2004-01-07 04:05 AM

There was a haunting silence from the wind
Dawns tranquil melancholy taints the spirit
The desires of what could - cloaked by ebony
And the autumn burnt the oak to cinders
Bleak memories forlorn...
Blown away with oaken ashes of autumn

A Romantic Heart
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-03

Posts 5496
Forever In Your Heart

1 posted 2004-01-07 04:24 AM

My favorite line was the last line...

~ARH

Open your eyes, open your mind, open your heart, let me come in and show you love.....~ARH

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

2 posted 2004-01-07 04:34 AM

very sad and haunting

Michelle_loves_Mike

Senior Member

since 2003-12-20

Posts 1189
Pennsylvania

3 posted 2004-01-07 12:13 PM

ashes can be from many sources,,,,a passion aflame!,,,,,,a hope downed in flames,,,,
but always,,they are reminders,,and teachers,,,
good write
Michelle

I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

4 posted 2004-01-07 01:48 PM

Obscurity~
This is such a lovely penning~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
[email protected]

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

5 posted 2004-01-07 03:43 PM

yes, haunting melancholy pervades this one...good job!

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Terrina
Member

since 2003-12-31

Posts 166
California

6 posted 2004-01-07 03:46 PM

This is one of the greats

Opeth
Senior Member

since 2001-12-13

Posts 1543
The Ravines

7 posted 2004-01-08 09:38 AM

I felt a sudden chill upon reading this. Enjoyed!

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

8 posted 2004-01-15 11:15 PM

"The desires of what could"

The memories of what could be are often wisked away by the winds of time as are the ashes of a fall fire. Excellent imagery

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

9 posted 2004-01-16 12:12 PM

Very good writing -- "Blown away with oaken ashes of autumn."

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

10 posted 2004-01-16 12:24 PM

There is something about an autumn fire that is eternal.
TD

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