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alan6501
Member

since 2004-01-03

Posts 89
PA

0 posted 2004-01-05 01:07 PM

The Shine

I saw the shine as I dug deeper
When I took a chance, I realized the truth
You went under my skin and tickled me plenty
There was a moment of healing in your power to soothe

Through the sleepless nights and drowning rain
A person concealed was shown to be real
Through the bittersweet and gnawing pain
I was allowed the liberty to feel

I don't understand how the barrier was caused
When I stopped being vain, I made it in
You zig to a zag that only brings light
There is now a chance for the next of kin

Through the hopeless moods and smothering smoke
A need repressed was filled on call
Through the ugliness and lies that choke
A hand was extended to lift me from my fall

wintertao
Member

since 2003-11-17

Posts 366
Okaloosa Island, FL

1 posted 2004-01-05 02:10 PM

hey! excellent! I really liked this alan, well done indead.

DavePage
Member Elite

since 2003-12-21

Posts 2917

2 posted 2004-01-05 04:42 PM

If what you are writing about is real - been there.

My problem was every woman I knew wanted a life, I didn't start to think about wanting a life until I was 28 and fought for the next 10 years to avoid it.

On the poem:

Words are very incisive, wolf tongued.

If this was a party:

Round about this time people started getting out Leonard Cohen and commenting on one track someone said "it makes you pleased you got the razor - cut rate".

Dave

Michelle_loves_Mike

Senior Member

since 2003-12-20

Posts 1189
Pennsylvania

3 posted 2004-01-05 07:25 PM

every time i log into the site,,,I look for your work first,,,i do enjoy your writings,,,,"the shine' is no exception....
take care
Michelle

I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike

alan6501
Member

since 2004-01-03

Posts 89
PA

4 posted 2004-01-05 08:20 PM

Thanks Michelle. That means so much to me! I'm going to search for your works after I write this. It means alot that you said that you look for my works first. Thanks!!

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