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Open Poetry #30

Cloudy Day

devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

0 posted 2004-01-02 08:50 PM

My first write in a long while so please forgive me if it's terrible. lol I've had a bad case of the ever feared "writers block."lol
You're the raincloud over my head
Sucking up my good thoughts
And drenching me with bad
Pouring over me
Soaking through my skin
That stoplight that seems to be stuck
On the never changing red
Cars racing by
And I'm in a hurry
I can't get you away
Like the bothersome things
Of everyday

"Come away with me, Wendy. Come away to Neverland."

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

1 posted 2004-01-02 11:54 PM

I really liked it! hugs, though.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

2 posted 2004-01-03 05:13 AM

I have a few people in my life like you have just described

I feel for ya

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

3 posted 2004-01-03 11:52 AM

That stoplight that seems to be stuck
On the never changing red

don't you just hate that

devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

4 posted 2004-01-04 08:45 PM

Thanks for the replys guys. Always nice to get some feedback.
*Allison*

"Come away with me, Wendy. Come away to Neverland."

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