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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Echoing a fragment distilled life wondering future Empathy understanding futility If you believe that you are futile Righteous anger for wakening an onlooker Who prefers to sleep? Waiting for the fools that pass Until cut from their supplies of voice, ego and possession You watch a fragment live And yourself wonder again |
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wintertao Member
since 2003-11-17
Posts 366Okaloosa Island, FL |
hey nice I like, happy new year! |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
"Echoing a fragment distilled life wondering future Empathy understanding futility" I liked the wording in the first line, especially! I don't know if you intended "Empathy", as an ECHO from another to oneself, or not, but I do like that concept. I enjoyed your poem, Dave. Happy New Year! Sadelite |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Dave I really enjoyed reading your words. Take care.......Sue I am in motion |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Thought provoking........makes one reflect a bit! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
fascinating, but quite an enigma for me Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
If I can destroy the image and I will because I lack a complete lack of subtle words to Echoing a fragment distilled life wondering future Where the hell am I going Empathy understanding futility I wish the wind could make it's mind up If you believe that you are futile Been Told often enough Got him right on the nose Righteous anger for wakening an onlooker Who prefers to sleep? Not around here if they have any sense Waiting for the fools that pass Until cut from their supplies of voice, ego and possession You watch a fragment live And yourself wonder again I thought they'd never leave. The comments are very much tongue in cheek but I was trying to do my "lets assume that the leaf wasn't hanging around for someone to turn up and was getting a bit worried about the crop control around there". Thanks for the comments Dave |
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