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Ravenwolfvoyager Member
since 2003-12-25
Posts 326 |
How be it that thy eyes are a surrenderment of glistening sorrow For thy hearts tribulation is but an after thought of thy will in thy days tomorrow I sought the ruins of thy vagrancy Only to have bestowed upon me a shadow endearing to my souls vacancy My vibrant light may not shine as it did in this morning after glow For thy dissipation has left me tacit, gray and cold Oh weary one where be thy wonderment and grace Thou hast cast a silhouette upon my hearts smile that causeth me to companion a lone tear that falleth from my face Be there no wine that I forsake in this final demise For the kiss of relinquishment give the vine no taste in the finality of loves surmise Spiral flakes shadow and overwhelm loves warm air In the validation of the rhapsody it is my soul left to despair I clasp my core for fear that it will follow Yet I cannot grasp that which has escaped me and left me barren and hollow Here within the shadows entombed I am forever imprisoned by the crimson foliages that lie upon my doom. |
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jaicie114 Senior Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 750On the edge of forever |
Whew, RWV... This one has left me speechless! So very, very sad...but, exquisitely crafted and so extremely vivid...wow...thank you! Love and Light...jc This I know as Truth...we are all Beings of Light. |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
So much pain and saddness I feel....but the beauty of your words shines through this poem, a beautiful piece... I like your Shakespearean style of poetry... ~ARH  Open your eyes, open your mind, open your heart, let me come in and show you love.....~ARH |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
 Just tears......................... |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I've been looking at the familiar too...glad there's a new and soon-to-be-familiar voice using it so well. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
What an absolute treat this piece was to read, thank you. A Very Happy New Year To You and Yours! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you know this touches me |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Raenwolf Excellent! |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Ravenwolf Yet another impressive piece of writing. I am so glad you are a part of our family here. Take care......Sue I am in motion |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Jeff~ Such poignancy in this penning~ You are such a nice person ... thank you for being here~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
I feel more people need to read this fine piece of writing. I am in motion |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Your writings are so stunning and captivating. Thank you for sharing your talent! If the sun never rises I want to go down in flames I want the last thing I hear to be you whispering my name. Every moment together is time that we borrow, so hold me tight and love me like there is no tomorrow. {Trace Adkins} |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
“I sought the ruins of thy vagrancy Only to have bestowed upon me a shadow endearing to my souls vacancy” Though, at first, I was only going to comment on the first line of this stanza, I found it necessary to give both the credit they so richly deserve. Exquisite craftsmanship…I love the “ruins of vagrancy” line. Expert! The second line simply amplifies the beauty of the first. Oh, how we seek that which we do not fully know, only to find that which we do not fully understand. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
 thy heart beats loud and clear |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed this a lot  |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Oh weary one where be thy wonderment and grace Thou hast cast a silhouette upon my hearts smile that causeth me to companion a lone tear that falleth from my face Jeff, even though this is so sad, it's beautiful. Like the others said, I'm glad you're here, too. (I thought that I had read this, but apparently I didn't. I'm glad that it came back up to the front.) Hugs, Ethel |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
ouchie  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
So expressive....I understand. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Methinks I would ask, though a secret should not be told, of the maiden who, or muse, perhaps, that leaves you with thoughts of gold...  Enjoying your work, Sir. |
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