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The River Weeps
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The River Weeps |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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{I weep} Thinking of rivers, their mist sweeping -- how they sometimes refigure and conceal losses and mistakes of life I have touched your heart in so many different ways from different angles, -- Still I seek to touch you, How? bending of souls we carried but once seemingly now I find strength in small stones & drifting wood, worn sometimes smoothed settling upon dreams of ripples I remember your eyes, the way you looked that ‘Saturday’ sitting so silent under the tree I longed to know your thoughts-- but you couldn’t find the words to release the emotion you felt how I could’ve guessed, yet, the stranger was gathering in your eyes; Pausing thought I wished for rain to fall from endless skies to rebirth my heart, & haunt your nights from the ever present shadows returning you in one piece I closed my eyes and fell back into you The night will be a long time coming then, maybe, from the river of life we can drink? I wait for you ~~**~~**~~ This morning there’s a calm |
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wintertao Member
since 2003-11-17
Posts 366Okaloosa Island, FL |
sweet, very creative |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
" I closed my eyes and fell back into you The night will be a long time coming then, maybe, from the river of life we can drink? I wait for you" Oh my Lauren....exquisitely beautiful. Once again you leave me speechless. Hugs~ In the midst of winter.. |
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Jes Member
since 2003-10-21
Posts 422Denmark |
Smile I liked it, I just needed to get the words right. Smile Jes |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
a wistful heart seeking read... as always you get to me deeply hugs, snow "...why does my skeleton pursue me |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
"I longed to know your thoughts-- but you couldn’t find the words to release the emotion you felt how I could’ve guessed, yet, the stranger was gathering in your eyes" The undeniable non-verbal. Perceptive and well put. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
gawd, you're good at endings |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Your title is beautiful, Lauren. I felt your words as clearly as I did the weeping, and the distance between worlds set apart. Hugs and Happy New to you, dear lady~ |
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harash Member
since 2003-12-27
Posts 99India |
this is great... |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I wished for rain to fall from endless skies to rebirth my heart, & haunt your nights from the ever present shadows returning you in one piece Lauren, this is so pretty. I really enjoyed reading it.  Hugs,  Ethel |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
This.... seemingly now I find strength in small stones & drifting wood, worn sometimes smoothed settling upon dreams of ripples I remember your eyes, the way you looked that ‘Saturday’ sitting so silent under the tree I longed to know your thoughts-- but you couldn’t find the words to release the emotion you felt how I could’ve guessed, yet, the stranger was gathering in your eyes; Pausing thought I wished for rain to fall from endless skies to rebirth my heart, & haunt your nights from the ever present shadows returning you in one piece I closed my eyes and fell back into you ~~~~~~~~~~~~~ and then this ... This morning there’s a calm I can’t explain- By the time I recognize this moment it will be gone I will bend light pretending it lingers on ~~~~~~ the poem...the signature...the muse *sigh* ... ( my oh my that muse) I cherish it as I do the poet ... for all the things spoken and unspoken... for all things just understood  I can remember Forever December, |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
I have been away for quite sometime. This makes me glad that I came back RB |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
this is just great - so much said so well - Paul |
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Hockeychick19 Member
since 2002-10-29
Posts 430Massachusetts, USA |
Lauren, This is beautiful! I can really see it as I read.  Hugs, ~Kelly~ Life is a gift so live it to the fullest! |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Lauren, to say this is beautiful would be a understatement! Lovely, as always sweetie...and as always, I understand Hugs, Amy "When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter" |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Deep river here for sure! I liked! |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Lauren A stunning piece of writing you have given us here, very much enjoyed. Take care......Sue I am in motion |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
GreenEyes~ I knew from the title that I would be swept away ... caught in the tides of your emotions~ I was ....~ 'seemingly now I find strength in small stones & drifting wood, worn sometimes smoothed settling upon dreams of ripples' Uh huh ! *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Ravenwolfvoyager Member
since 2003-12-25
Posts 326 |
The right is fabulous, it touches the essence of love in every fashion. The serenity and thoughts to the self are timeless. Thank you for the share...captivating. |
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