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Titanic
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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Titanic So I sit watching the inevitable; she bound to a man so bound to himself that he cannot see her yearning only for the mate of her soul There is another, the match of her, with the feel of a casual shape-shifter, unbindable yet deeper than ocean, deeper than hope; their courses set to cross and in the crossing meet while the ship that is their world slides on, bound reckless to wreckage on a blinding night All seems safe, follow the course as it bends to the curve of the world, the straightest way though not straight at all, merely the easiest way around It seems so easy, push for speed, rush the predictable, advance boldly into the known, assume the unassumable because it has always been and press on They meet at the coming of night, lovers already as is their fate, bound for a day of moments, a moment of days when there is beauty and release and a future undefined, to be taken with the stroke of a hand through thinnest air But it is a dream, true only within itself, until the dark moment of waking when all bonds break And as in every such meeting, the iceberg wins [This message has been edited by Ratleader (12-22-2003 11:15 AM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A good synopsis of the movie, Ed... very good. Thank you. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ratleader Good write, but I think the iceberg melts. LOL |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
mmmm so many possibilities |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Sometimes what seems to be inevitable isn't... and a collision is avoided, disaster averted... simply because someone shouted warning. I hope this ship finds warmer waters to sail in... and safety. *S* Excellent write, my friend... as always. *S* |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Yes, the berg is by definition already a loser, since it's on its way to the great meltdown and time is most definitely not on its side. So everybody loses. Do icebergs dream, I wonder? ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Yes. *G* They're awfully susceptible to heat... and also to blows... so they have nightmares of warming trends and picks. *G* |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I think I like this better than the movie! Enjoyed reading this side of you, and of course I'm a sucker when it comes to romance!  Fascinating spin you wrote..... Take two Ed~ |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Ed, Wonderful write...I loved the movie, but I agree with Lori on this one...I might have liked this more! Happy Holidays, Amy "When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter" |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
I like the metaphor, Rat. It seems to say to me that often we get so caught up in ourselves that we imperil those around us, and open the way for somebody else to enter. In doing that, there can be only loss on a Titanic scale. |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
As the berg moves toward the equator, is it melting? Or, does it weep? |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
thank you for sharing with us |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
It collides with the sun each day...and always loses. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed...This touched me to tears, like the movie did "They meet at the coming of night, lovers already as is their fate, bound for a day of moments, a moment of days when there is beauty and release and a future undefined, to be taken with the stroke of a hand through thinnest air" Beautiful!  |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Great work, Ratleader. "When your life is tossed and turning |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
"There is another, the match of her, with the feel of a casual shape-shifter, unbindable yet deeper than ocean, deeper than hope" Reminds me of this stanza by Hardy... "And as the smart ship grew In stature, grace, and hue, In shadowy silent distance grew the Iceberg too." (Thomas Hardy "The covergence of the twain...1914) Ratty: For some reason I get the idea that this is not about a ship at all, but about a love affair....Maybe I am way off? Anyway a most excellent read....well done, thank you... _______ice ><> |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
I'll go with Sunshine on this one -- well-written and caught the heart of the show. [This message has been edited by James_A_Fraser (12-23-2003 09:18 AM).] |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
The movie's about a love affair -- I wrote this while it was showing last night on TV....My muse has been pretty quiet lately, so I tried reflecting things off the show. It kinda worked but I'm not entirely pleased with the result.... |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
I especially liked this part. It has a very pretty sound, gentle image, and flow about it. All seems safe, follow the course as it bends to the curve of the world, (As I just read my comment, I could see Santa Claus following those coarsers round the bends. I know that didn't have a thing to do with your poem, but when I isolated these words, Santa just appeared out of the blue sky! It must be an omen!) As always, I enjoyed your poem. Sadelite [This message has been edited by Sadelite (12-22-2003 11:21 PM).] |
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pictureme Member
since 2003-11-28
Posts 248Ohio, USA |
In reading your poem...I felt like...ummmm "de ja vu" :-) than I remembered I too, have seen the movie :-p. A beautiful movie that touched me to tears and a beautiful poem that definately melts the ice! Great write and Great movie! thanks for sharing this one! keep keeping poetry alive, pictureme :-) |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
WHEW...the metaphors!!! I love this! Saving it. ~K~ |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
This was one of my favorite movies..it was so sad and yet romantic..I loved the music..I have the soundtrack....It was sad to know all those people died and that they now rest in their watery grave...so sad that two people meet, fate...find their true love and then have to live the rest of their lives without eachother! Thanks for the poem~ ~ARH  Open your eyes, open your mind, open your heart, let me come in and show you love.....~ARH |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
They meet at the coming of night, lovers already as is their fate, bound for a day of moments, a moment of days when there is beauty and release and a future undefined, to be taken with the stroke of a hand through thinnest air the culmination of the God and Godess of twins tied forever to be one...one heart, soul and mind, through the emboidiment of a very special plan...if not in this world, then the next.... wonderfully written...with the perception of a seaman at heart...very much enjoyed...thank you for sharing and wishing you a very lovely Holiday Season. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
The best tribute I've seen to the movie even if you are not yet satisfied. ....... you are a wizard, muse or no! |
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Ravenwolfvoyager Member
since 2003-12-25
Posts 326 |
Titanic was a great movie but this poem earned its own merits. The course of description is so vivid that one cannot help but pay tribute to the excellent work and narrative accomplished here. Thank you for sharing. Pat was right. |
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i_love_ferrets New Member
since 2003-12-31
Posts 3 |
Excellent job! I could just see the Titanic as I read the poem. You are very a very talented writer. I hope you think about getting your work published. If I was you, I would. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Hi Ed  You are awesome, you know!!! Hugs,  |
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Michelle_loves_Mike
since 2003-12-20
Posts 1189Pennsylvania |
somtimes,,,the iceburg that wins,,,is fate,,or life,,,,and tho it may not sink us,,,,it can sink our spirit.....good write i enjoy it Michelle I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike |
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jaicie114 Senior Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 750On the edge of forever |
Ed...I surely don't know what's not to be satisfied about with this beauty...but, then the muses must have their own way sometimes. This is lovely, though...thank you. Love and Light...jc This I know as Truth...we are all Beings of Light. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I have to put this in my library |
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