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christian
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since 2002-12-18

Posts 331

0 posted 2003-12-21 02:40 AM

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         sing to me
         make it a november halloween
         and remind me how ugly i am,
         don't you know,
         how much you make me hurt
         how much you make me feel
         how much you make me smile ..

         and on every cloudy afternoon
         inside closets--dreaming ..
         i'm screaming
         you find me
         you love me
         you don't know what to say
         but you say the most perfect things
         with such a beautiful acoustic
         you fingerpick; lyrical fairytales--you say ..
         and you take me away
         from writing poems on a
         cloudy afternoon
         inside closets--dreaming, so

         sing to me
         and make it a daytime soap opera,
         remind me how shakespearean
         things can get and make me forget
         don't you know,
         how much you make me hurt
         how much you make me feel
         how much you make me smile ..

         change me like i know you could
         and leave me there,
         bent and broken--in peices complete
         behind locked doors, discrete
         and whisper of bathroomsuicides
         i wanna go away
         because when mirrors have nothing to say
         side-sink reflections
         look broken ..
         and of emotions unspoken
         you come to realize that
         even angels can be bitches, yeah

         so could you sing of things--unpretentiously
         give this quasimodo the chance
         to daydream in slowmotion
         and flickerfade verses
         into the notion
         that maybe, just maybe

         things can be okay
         things will be okay ..

         sing to me
         make it a november halloween,
         and remind me how ugly i am,
         don't you know,
         how much you make me hurt
         how much you make me feel
         how much you make me smile ..

[This message has been edited by christian (12-21-2003 02:46 AM).]

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
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1 posted 2003-12-21 03:58 AM

gawd christian, this is so sad to me...

I will sing to you if it's what you want...but you might be better off listening to the radio

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

2 posted 2003-12-21 07:45 AM

christian - you sure do write with feelings. Excellent writing...

BC

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

3 posted 2003-12-21 12:09 PM

Hey, Christian

It's good to see you here. Where have you been? Still in college?
Don't stay gone so long, okay?

This is a very good song you have written, Christian...sad, but I think you intended that. Right?

(Hey, thanks for the sweet words on my poem....and I have missed you!!

)
Hugs to you,

Martie

Moderator

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

4 posted 2003-12-21 02:18 PM

Christian...Feelings and truth with hurt and love, much in this deep and reflective song.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

5 posted 2003-12-21 03:03 PM

Christian! Welcome home!

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

6 posted 2003-12-21 03:49 PM

This leaves a lasting melancholy... well written... welcome back! *S*

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

7 posted 2003-12-21 04:24 PM

So good to see you back Christian...I've been looking for you

and this... amazing.

I'm keeping it.

Maree

fate is not just
whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)

christian
Member

since 2002-12-18

Posts 331

8 posted 2003-12-21 10:46 PM

ethel, yeah still in college. it's
midsemester here, so i'm relaxing.
actually not really. late minute christmas
shopping and volunteer work keeps me
bogged. this is probably masochism
at its finest, ha. nice to you see again
too.

hey sunshine, thanks for the warm
welcome back.

and thanks for the feedback, everybody,
as always, i appreciated it.

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