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Engineering Her
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Engineering Her |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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Engineering Her In the room the engineers with their cool brown engineer eyes calmly discuss abatement and the efficacy of cost valuation models her jacket on for the cold, arms crossed breasts compressed in brown leatherette walls naked with cabinets above no tables and the outlines of hastily moved equipment she sits, languidly crossed legs, the gray slacks flow along her thighs to verify calibration of the diaphragm pump and adjust the dilution ratio painted concrete adorned with a fire extinguisher and safety orange electric outlets the hair fine, moving in soft undertones; does she color it? Would she? Why? line check the ladder logic sequencing in the programmable logic controller eyes deep, gentle behind the long dark lashes her cheeks pale but slightly flushed system balance and backwashing cycle of the carbon filter canisters slender neck just curving to her chin the circlet earrings sparkle white questioning the reliability of data acquisition due to counterflow potential at the sampling point and at the break she stands waiting in the sterile doorway, backlit by autumn sun [This message has been edited by Ratleader (12-18-2003 08:55 PM).] |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
LOL... I like this very much, my friend... Thinking on two levels is obviously not difficult for you... neither is imagining which thoughts gave the most pleasure. *G* Excellently engineered! *G* |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
RatL., I chuckle! You have such diversity! This was fun to read. OHH yes, I'm waiting to see your diversity in my minute challenge... Sadie [This message has been edited by Sadelite (12-17-2003 04:49 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A break in your day... and a delightful one it was! |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
and at the break she stands waiting in the sterile doorway, backlit by autumn sun ~~~~~ I love the image of this.....I enjoyed this Ed~ Lauren~ ~~**~~**~~**~~**~~ |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
a very interesting study in contrasts. i wonder what you intended... the "interpretation" (used loosely) i gathered as reading is a dichotomy. i like it like that.  cool. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
sounds like you could use a bit of christmas magic right about now...... |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
hmmm ...I am not much for engineering...but enjoyed your poem with a smile~ M |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"breasts compressed in brown leatherette" Great line! Also, really liked the contrasts. BEEEEEEEEE well! |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Yanno 'leader?....When I first read this title...the first thing that came to mind was a plastic surgeon and what some of these women have done to themselves.....all for better looking noses, or bigger boobs or less fat etc......good write my friend... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
The contrasts in this were great, Ed...gave me a chuckle thinking of you multi tasking. |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
great poetry Ed - loved the contrasts and conversations - Paul |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
excellent use of nuance and innuendo. very clever. I think I've been in meetings like that before...now I know what Ed (name changed to protect the innocent) is always thinking about...and I always thought he was just a deep thinker. LOL |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ratleader Crash and the symbols clash, well done my friend well done. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
That's entertainmen for ya!!! You're so cool, and so much fun, and always you make me smile. Way to go big guy!!! |
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