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KoKo
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since 2003-02-15

Posts 995
Inside the shadow's shadow

0 posted 2003-12-16 09:36 AM

Could we ever be the ones
To light the way
For eachother
Or will we
Forever
Be so selfish
As to swallow
Each flame
We find?

[This message has been edited by KoKo (12-16-2003 11:19 AM).]

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2003-12-16 10:17 AM

very nicely done, KoKo

I usually just take a line or word from the poem itself, one that might 'grab' the reader

KoKo
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since 2003-02-15

Posts 995
Inside the shadow's shadow

2 posted 2003-12-16 10:22 AM

Thanks, Midnitesun. My title originally for it was "Could We", but didn't like that too much.
Titles are my worst enemy, lol

Thanks again!!!!

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

3 posted 2003-12-16 10:32 AM

Yep, that is the title I would have suggested as well ~ "Could We"

~ May you "light the way for each other"!

EA

EvocativeVerse2
Senior Member

since 2003-09-10

Posts 1279

4 posted 2003-12-16 10:50 AM

Hi Ko Ko...I love this. As for a title I would name it Could We Ever Be. I usually take my titles from the first line of a poem. If I had written this one that is the title I would use. Well done.

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

dingusjr
Member

since 2003-09-24

Posts 415
Missouri

5 posted 2003-12-16 10:51 AM

I vote "Could We?"

KoKo
Senior Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 995
Inside the shadow's shadow

6 posted 2003-12-16 11:19 AM

~Smiling~ Thanks guys. Could We it is ^_^

Jason Lyle
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since 2003-02-07

Posts 1438
With my darkling

7 posted 2003-12-16 11:22 AM

nicely done!

Jason

KoKo
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since 2003-02-15

Posts 995
Inside the shadow's shadow

8 posted 2003-12-16 11:31 AM

Thank ya

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

9 posted 2003-12-16 10:25 PM

Nice writing...James

KoKo
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since 2003-02-15

Posts 995
Inside the shadow's shadow

10 posted 2003-12-17 04:26 AM

Thank you kindly, James!

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