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Seduced, By An Ocean
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Seduced, By An Ocean |
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Antonio_L Member
since 2003-12-01
Posts 110NorthEast USA |
She had never seen you before, deep, brooding, tiny wavelets flow to your shore, an ocean, constantly moving. She walked bare-footed on your sand, you put your moon to watch her. On stirring air, your sirens' band she looks into you, and in a murmer... "Where do you come from, mighty sea, where have you been before? What in your travels did you see before you found me on this shore?" And you spoke. And she opened her mind to your spell. Those smiling lips apart, ear to whispers from sighing shell, ready to follow her wayward heart. "I come from the east and I come from the west from lands far too many to count, and I have seen people whose lives have been blessed, from peasants, to kings on the mount. "I am strong and all knowing and can offer you much from riches to love and good marriage. So if you are looking for riches and such come ride in my watery carriage." With hope in her heart and a spring in her step she ran into your welcoming arms. I called out too late, she went into your depth, she succumbed to your treacherous charms. Tiny wavelets now at ebb, your conspiring moon has gone. In her footsteps I sadly tread Alone, I cannot remain alone... Antonio_L, copyright © 2003 Another first. I have been reading here for the last two weeks whenever I had a chance and I have responded to several entries but the number of wonderful poems coming through here is staggering. Today I plucked up the courage to offer one of my little writings. I hope I can fit in here. Tony J [This message has been edited by Antonio_L (12-13-2003 10:47 PM).] |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
This is MOST beautiful, Welcome to Passions, we are so glad you have decide to join us....any questions you have please feel free to ask...take a look around, Passions has a lot to offer.... please check your email for a special greeting Kindly, Greeneyes~ ~~**~~**~~**~~**~~ |
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Antonio_L Member
since 2003-12-01
Posts 110NorthEast USA |
Good heavens Greeneyes, thank you for that wonderful welcome to such a nice place. And from one green eyes to another, thank you too for that very nice card. I made quite a mess of my HTML, it receives it differently than from whence I came... *smile*, I will not make that mistake next time. Tony. J |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Wow. If this is a 'little' write, I hope you gather all needed courage to post more. This is a wonderfully rich, well written piece.  thank you for sharing! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS! What a wonderful entrance post! I look forward to seeing more of your work. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ [This message has been edited by Enchantress (12-13-2003 12:40 PM).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Antonio, I don't think you're going to have any problems fitting into this Circle of Friends...you will be a welcome addition to our poets circle. Welcome to Passions! And thank you for all of the lovely comments you've given me on my posts! Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen? |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Just beautiful, I enjoyed the push and pull, and gentle strength in your poem. Not to mention the lovely scenery you painted with your words. Welcome to Passions Antonio~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
ear to whispers from sighing shell, ready to follow her wayward heart. I love those lines! The whole write! It is just gorgeous! Welcome to Passions!  Glad to have you here! |
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Antonio_L Member
since 2003-12-01
Posts 110NorthEast USA |
I am totally floored by the wonderful reception I have found here. As I explained in one of my emails earlier, I have been looking for a "poetry" home for some time and I like very much this warmth. I saw a number of you had visited my new website which is still so much under construction. The link from there to my message boads is not working today as my host server went down last night with problems with their internet access. We do have a working link of sorts but it is unsatisfactory for posting. I have had some emails about this and will respond to each of you, thank you for asking of this. A warning, (**friendly one**), most of my poems are what I call "story poems" because I like to tell little stories in them. I hope this will be okay All of which I write will be from my own life, and how it was touched and changed by those who came into it. I will try not to bore. Oh, and I stay away from politics entirely. Thank you Passing Shadows, Blues Serenade, Greeneyes, Enchantress, Midnight Sun and Sunshine...you are all quite special ladies. Tony. J |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Well then... Welcome Home, Tony  |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Antonio_L, This is an awwesome write! Thank you for posting it and welcome to piptalk! I'll be looking forward to reading more... Sadelite |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"She had never seen you before" Had to smile at how perfectly this poem fits another moth who writes here. I'll send her an ocean alert. Welcome...pull up a porch step and tell us some stories.  |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
beautiful beautiful poem! you have an amazing talent and I look forward to reading many of your "stories" I'm so glad you like Passions so much, it is a wonderful place full of many amazing people! take care and happy holidays, Amy  "love is like a butterfly-- |
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Antonio_L Member
since 2003-12-01
Posts 110NorthEast USA |
And thank you too Sadelite, Duncan and Aimster for your very kind words. Because I have been asked, I have just made a post into Announcements regarding my message boards being down, sorry but they should be fine by tomorrow. I was advised somewhere not to post too many poems here so will wait a day or two. Tony. J [This message has been edited by Antonio_L (12-13-2003 11:04 PM).] |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Welcome...certainly glad you "plucked up the courage" to post this wonderful debut. Now I will have to check out your web site. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
   (big hugggsssssss) This is a most wonderful debut, sweet friend, it ends a bit sad but I know with your golden ehart you will find true happiness you can cherish forever, yay, God Bless You! Welcome to Passions, sweet Antonio, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your wonderful poetry, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Antonio, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Antonio...I have been seduced by an ocean too. Welcome to Passions! |
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Antonio_L Member
since 2003-12-01
Posts 110NorthEast USA |
Thank you steavenr, Mistletoe Angel and Martie, I really appreciate your kind words. I remember you from when I was lurking last week Martie and I believe I commented on one or two of your poems. I am trying to get around and read all the poems from you generous people who have visited mine so be patient, my times are short and still I am trying to find my ways around here. Tony. J |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well first off welcome! I can't wait to read more Antonio as I love poems with a story to them and especially ones I can tell are drawn from real life experiences. I won't take unnecessary space but know you are going to like it here, there are so many gifted writers to share your work with, and gain ideas to inspire you. Happy Holidays. |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
welcome to passions |
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Antonio_L Member
since 2003-12-01
Posts 110NorthEast USA |
Why thank you Mysteria and 1slick_lady for you very warm welcomes. There was a time in my life when I think I asked every girl I met to marry me. **Chuckle** I must have thought I was ready. You can read of one such time up above a little in, A Rose And A Poem. Tony. J |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Exceptional first post! You captured me from first to last word. I do hope you will stay and continue to post your work. I think you will find Passions to be a place to grow in your writing...a place where your voice will be heard. Indeed, this has been my experience. I look forward to reading more of your work. Patricia |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
She had never seen you before, deep, brooding, tiny wavelets flow to your shore, an ocean, constantly moving. She walked bare-footed on your sand, you put your moon to watch her. On stirring air, your sirens' band she looks into you, and in a murmer... "Where do you come from, mighty sea, where have you been before? What in your travels did you see before you found me on this shore?" And you spoke. And she opened her mind to your spell. Those smiling lips apart, ear to whispers from sighing shell, ready to follow her wayward heart. ===================================== At 44 years old..I only just saw the ocean for the first time last year ... it is by far the most beautiful and powerful thing I have ever experienced. You write a part of me in this bittersweet beauty. A wonderful poetic entrance. Welcome to Poetry Land Tony...its so nice to have you here with us.  I can remember Forever December, |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Indeed you do fit in. Welcome to Passions in Poetry. believe in what your heart feels... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Gadzooks! You are most definitely a welcomed new member to our poetic family of kindred spirits! I love your style of story writing and I read your comment regarding that they well be based on your true life experiences! It will be like reading your diary ~ and with your permission! Warm welcoming hugs, Linda Earth Angel |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
Excellently expressed Antonio , I live close to the ocean and often stroll the shore , it can be quite inspirational Hope |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
 Enjoyed your first post! |
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Antonio_L Member
since 2003-12-01
Posts 110NorthEast USA |
Thank you Patricia, Scorpio, Janet Marie, Earth Angel, Hope S and Nightshade, I really do appreciate your kind words and your welcome into your home here. Janet I was touched when you told us you had never seen an ocean until last year. I have a poem for you soon. You see I was born way way down in the South Pacific Ocean and grew up with that ocean as my playground and tutor. I could not imagine being without my ocean and my forests. It was also my larder, and when the tide went out my table was laid. The poem tells of a very young boy working hard to make enough mooney to take his new found love to the village dance. And he teaches her to dive for the lobster, hiding in their caves and to dig for the shellfish we called "pipis," (pronounced, pip-pees) and how to cook them right there on the sand. I had a wonderful childhood and will think of it often. Hope I can share a little with you all. Tony. J |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
That was awesome.  Welcome to Passions!!!! |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
wow reading on to one of your replies I was amazed when you mentioned pip-pees , We had an American friend visit these shores a couple of years ago and we spent the afternoon delving and gathering pip-pees Hope |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
" "Where do you come from, mighty sea, where have you been before? What in your travels did you see before you found me on this shore?" And you spoke. And she opened her mind to your spell. Those smiling lips apart, ear to whispers from sighing shell, ready to follow her wayward heart." I enjoyed your poem very much |
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Antonio_L Member
since 2003-12-01
Posts 110NorthEast USA |
he takes five minutes from schedule... Hello and thank you Hope S, Nightshade and KoKo, I appreciate your kind words... thought this poem had drifted away quietly. Hope I have spent time in Australia but did not know you had pipis there too. I was talking of the islands of New Zealand. I guess you too have had many feasts on the beach. Have a wonderful day all. PS: and thank you too Sea, we must have double posted almost. Nice name [This message has been edited by Antonio_L (12-15-2003 10:19 AM).] |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Way to go, Tony. I like the way you flow in your writing, keeping everything consistent. A word of caution, Tony. Balladeer is a scalawag, and Toerag isn't much better. They'll try to tell you I'm something other than completely trustworthy and a swell guy. DON'T LISTEN TO THEM!!!! |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
 Hi Tony I am so glad to meet you!! This is a wonderful first post. I wasn't here much in Open for a couple of days, so I'm late getting to your welcoming party. I am so glad to see you are posting here, and I really look forward to seeing more of your work. I love the water and beach and poems about it. I've written a few myself. LOL Again, welcome to our Family Of Friends at Passions In Poetry. I see you are going to fit right in here. Hugs, Ethel |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Fit in? You more then fit in Antonio. This is a wonderful poem. Love it. Very well done. Great read and it was my absolute pleasure to see this. Keep it up! Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Hey Antonio...feel like you're home? If you can write and post more stories of the ocean, you'll have a fan in Janet Marie for sure...she just can't get enough salt, y'know? |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Tony...It looks like you hit a home run with your first poem. Welcome to our home now your home as well, cause once you visit you can never really leave for very long. I enjoyed your poem and look forward to reading more soon...Paul "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
the lull of the ocean can foster your entire being, showing you things and talking to you in a way you've never before heard...this poem lulled me like the ocean does...drifting me off to a place of peace and supernatural harmony, with the music of nature lapping in each wave...rocking me to a tender loving place. This was an exceptional read...welcome and looking forward to many others you might have to share and offer. Good day to you sir..wishing you and yours a perfect day. |
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WannabePoet Member
since 2003-12-10
Posts 62New York USA |
ahhh, such beautiful words, I have already read it three times over. , you are truly gifted with the ability to write with your emotion. Looking forward to seeing more of your work. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Hello Tony, what a pleasure it was to read this. Welcome to the pages of blue. Please take some time and get to know us as we get to know you. What an incredible first post, and I will be awaiting more sharings from your pen. Welcome Aboard! It's better than I could have planned.. |
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Antonio_L Member
since 2003-12-01
Posts 110NorthEast USA |
another five minutes stolen from my other self... Well LngJhnAg, I will try to be careful of those scalliwags but in all honesty, I have been known to wag my own scalli, quite often in fact. And that was NOT meant to be naughty. Thank you for your kind words and too, gary'sgirl... sweet card, and Evocative Verse2, Sunshine, Paul Wilson, Lee J, Gentle Spirit and Wannabe Poet. How I would love to sit and chat with each of you kind souls but unfortunately for now, that is not possible. I do however, think I have time to share another little scribble with you. I'll run back on up to the top. Tony. [This message has been edited by Antonio_L (12-15-2003 02:59 PM).] |
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