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Crawl into something -- duet between me and Ceinwyn
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Crawl into something -- duet between me and Ceinwyn |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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Crawl into something by me and Ceinwyn The light crawls across my eyelids -- pupils below in dilation at the coming onslaught of morning. My thoughts crawl back into my head, my senses procrastinating. Half-inspired dreams, figments of long-forgotten truths congealing in memory ... and a lack of sleep. I try to swallow back the filmy residue of... Sometimes, when the light hits me just right, I recall her hands curving into mine. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
YES! I was going beserk. and now..well it may be too late but you two..are..drools... And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!" |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"Sometimes, when the light hits me just right, I recall her hands curving into mine. " Great write Mikey & Ceinwyn. Especially love the above lines. *God it's good to 'see' you guys again!*  ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile~ |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I know, I know. We rock. |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
 hey Liz I'm drooling too!!! gawd...thank you for the experience Mikey...you know it was better than chocolate  If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Very nice indeed, Ceinwyn and Bsquirrel...yup you rock! Maree fate is not just |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Awwww.... too sweet. "Experience," hm? My dear, this is not just an experience. It's a lifestyle. Didn't you get the brochure? There's no turning back now! AH HA HA HA HA HA! [This message has been edited by bsquirrel (10-07-2003 06:48 PM).] |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
YES YES! I feel like an herbal essences commercial, but YES! |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Very, very nice. Yep! It rocks. |
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dertah Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584 |
ha ha ( i laugh like french man and remember her touch) |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
No fair, dertah! Your opening line is way better than mine. |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Loved the title and the poem. Awesome work, you two! ~Tier |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
yay!!!! If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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PsychoticBunni Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 162Mythical Atlantis |
dude u 2 are like... crazy. but i like the poem. It reminds me of the sleep that i need desperately. Meg Meg-cheauvanistsshould be tortured mercilessly by being tied to a mast and listening to Sirens singing their sexual song |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
see...don't you feel so honored that he choose you... hehe Chris and mikey..ya both are incredible and I still l#ve this And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!" |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Too sweet. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Kris and Mikey . . this line is priceless: I try to swallow back the filmy residue of... EXACTLY! aww this was kinda bittersweet too the both of you write beautifully together *smile* xxoo |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
what a stunning write, of two talents.....I LOVE the last stanza.....what an image!! greatly enjoyed... Lauren~ There's a song inside my soul |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
About bloody time! |
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pandonov Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 478b/w conscience and insolence |
..." try to swallow back the filmy residue".. damn this is so cool |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
I too really like the ..."filmy residue..." line and the rest of it was great too. Kool jwesley |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
I WROTE IT I WROTE IT WOOHOOO *jumps up and down* and here I thought that line sucked..If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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