Blackie [Earth Angel's challenge]

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Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

0 posted 2003-10-03 08:11 PM

Blackie

You took me in as a kitten
and left me with an unusually common name
Blackie
simply because your brother and sister
liked it.

I came the same day as that
overgrown puppy,
Tippy
and he pawed, and I scrapped, but that
night, I slept on his belly
and we tolerated with the idea
of being
tolerable.

It wasn’t but about a year later,
long after I had learned to mouse
in the fields, and would only show up
for obligatory strokes, when
you moved away.

I remembered your cries, calling me,
while I stalked a small hare,
but you scared him away.

Your father said he would come back
for me, but the van was packed.
You were moving just three miles away
and I really was a country
cat.

Your father didn’t tell you
Until you were a bit older,
but he checked on me
every week, until new people moved
into that old house,
and they said they would feed me
if I ever came to the door.

He explained how I would keep the gophers
and other rodents at bay.
And I did.

But I remembered your stroke, and headed
out one day, in search of you.
I didn’t see the car.

Still, I found you.  I came to your door,
those three miles away from where
I last saw you, two years after
you moved, and howled at the door.

You let me in, crying my name, knowing me
immediately, but I went to your parents’ room,
crawled under their double bed
and died from internal injuries.

I had only wanted to feel the love
of a family
again.

You were all so good to me.  I had been gone
two years, and gave me unconditional love
even after I had died.

Some months later, I visited you.
Remember?

I came down the hallway, through the kitchen,
stroked past your legs, then out the back door,
which was closed.

You stood there like stone, I’m not sure what you
thought.  It was time to leave, I wanted you to
see me go, as good as I ever was.

Tippy was on the other side, and I said goodbye,
and he barked.  Remember?

You were sure you were just dreaming,
or doing that thing, what did they call it, fancy thinking?
But I saw your mother, too, and she came in,
and asked if you had seen anything come by.
The tone of her voice was gravely serious,
and you answered honestly,
speaking my name, Blackie.

She nodded.  She had seen me, too.

You’ve never forgotten me.
After that, you began writing, remember?

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (10-03-2003 08:19 PM).]

Lotus Breeze
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since 2003-09-06

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1 posted 2003-10-03 08:19 PM

Wonderful poemstory I enjoy, you write so well

PsychoticBunni
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since 2003-10-03

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Mythical Atlantis

2 posted 2003-10-03 08:30 PM

wow. heavy. i love it. u should kep it up. Poor kitty.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2003-10-03 08:31 PM

OHMYGOSH!!
What a story!!!
I'd say challenge was extremely well met.
Linda will be more than pleased.

~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile~

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

4 posted 2003-10-03 08:45 PM

Karilea, I don't know what the challenge is, but
I sure did love the story.

Hugs

Ethel

Duncan
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since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

5 posted 2003-10-03 09:06 PM

"You’ve never forgotten me.
After that, you began writing, remember?"

Well I'll be damned...

And ya know what? I had a cat named Blackie too. (I however, picked the name...lol). He dissapeared one day and a few months later my neighbors found him living at a small motel a couple miles away. They brought him home to me and I was so happy to see him but the next day he was gone again. Turned out he had a girlfriend at the motel. Guess my Blackie had a different set of priorities than yours did.

<------- Chaucer

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

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Portland, Oregon

6 posted 2003-10-03 09:39 PM

(big hugggssssssss) Oh Karilea, my heart just cried imagining this kitten, sweet friend, it truly is a heartaching thing simply to ask "...remember" in any circumstance, to see the veins on someones neck swell, the marble eyes, the tangible quivers in the air, and you pick up on this sixth sense so well! (sigh) This is powerful, sweet friend, Linda will absolutely enjoy this, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

QjQ
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since 2003-04-18

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7 posted 2003-10-03 10:27 PM

ok

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

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Realms of Light

8 posted 2003-10-04 01:56 AM

Karilea, I still have goosebumps all over! I am delighted that you accepted the challenge--you more than met it! That was some story! Yes, animals have spirits too and they drop by for visits! ....I've still got tingles all over!

You wrote this with a touch of magic!

Love & Eternal Life,
Linda

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

9 posted 2003-10-04 07:12 AM

Wonderful perspective with marvelous metaphors and images.
Very good writing as usual...

Eric

The best teachers have the biggest ears

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

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10 posted 2003-10-08 08:48 AM

Absolutely a perfect write for Lindas challenge. Sometimes, yes we can still feel a presence...
well done Mum...

EvocativeVerse2
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since 2003-09-10

Posts 1279

11 posted 2003-10-08 09:55 AM

Spooky Sunshine. Made think of the ghosts in my closet. It is very heart felt read though. Well done.

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

SmartChick
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since 2001-09-23

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On A Journey To The Unknown

12 posted 2003-10-08 07:41 PM

Sunshine, I really enjoyed this story.

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

13 posted 2003-10-09 06:44 AM

How cute was he! Wow what an experience for you all including Blackie.

love this Karilea

Maree.

fate is not just
whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)

A Romantic Heart
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since 1999-09-03

Posts 5496
Forever In Your Heart

14 posted 2003-10-09 06:57 AM

Just wanted to say thanks for the photo help and I liked the story about blackie, I had a black kitty once when I was a little girl!

~ARH

True poets don't write with the ink of quill or pen, but with the ink of their heart~

Marty Baird
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since 2003-09-20

Posts 90
Georgia, U.S.

15 posted 2003-10-09 08:20 AM

I have troble with sad. However recognize your work as being very good congradulations.

scorpio
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since 2002-10-02

Posts 5178
right...there

16 posted 2003-10-09 08:42 AM

What a wonderful story...a moving write..

believe in what your heart feels...

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

17 posted 2003-10-10 10:11 AM

Just mention a black cat, and you've got this soft heart's attention... Write such a beautiful story... and you leave me grateful for the spirit that pushed you towards that pen. *S* Excellent work! *S*

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