Open Poetry #29 |
ulysses |
Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
ulysses should I dig out the absence of you swell you into stacked-up days spit up May from my mouth wrapped in my voice then cast it far across the waves would you stand still to the movement of my brown eyes and the flash of my hair over you? I’ll stir the flow of you butterfly keep you here upon my brow “bare bodied and swum through” with me in this blur of life fate is not just whose cooking smells good but which way the wind blows (Ani DiFranco) [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (10-03-2003 03:41 AM).] |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Gah, this is just...amazing work. Thank you so much.. |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
This was written from the heart and it's easy to see. Crystal |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You had me with the first two lines, as always, you do not disappoint Maree~ So softly stirring~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well girl, this snapped me back a few hundred eons or so into a time of golden fleece and adventurous men that never knew how good they had it on their own home shores... Well done! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Dark Angel Enjoyed the read. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Kaoru, glad you liked and thank YOU for the amazing. angelblueyes, indeed it was and thank you for stopping by and your lovely reply. Ms Blues... thank you.....glad to not have disppointed you. Sunshinygirl, so glad you enjoyed this but I must tell you Ulysses is actually a type of butterfly/butterflies I'm referring to and this isn't actually about a "butterfly" so to speak. Sheesh do I sound confused? Anyway I can see how my poem lead to your thoughts...thank you for the links and Seymour, thank you.....glad you enjoyed fate is not just whose cooking smells good but which way the wind blows (Ani DiFranco) [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (10-03-2003 06:54 AM).] |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Maree: would you stand still to the movement of my brown eyes and the flash of my hair over you? I’ll stir the flow of you butterfly I do believe I see exactly what you mean the stir of you . . . ahhh is beauty indeed Maree *smiling here* This kind of melted into me' this write xxoo |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
should I dig out the absence of you swell you into stacked-up days spit up May from my mouth wrapped in my voice then cast it far across the waves would you stand still to the movement of my brown eyes and the flash of my hair over you? you know...I'm not sure how anyone could stand still... I think you would probably disconcert even the jaded if they saw the movement of your brown eyes... |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
nice |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Maree This is breathtaking! |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
So? You decided to gild a lily. Well done Darksis, another beauty! Ed |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
*faints* |
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n2dmystic Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 253beyond the doors of perception |
very nice, indeed! Peace, Joe |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
This is beautiful...simply beautiful. Every word charged with so much feeling...nothing else to say, nothing else appropriate, just that one word. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Well done! |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
maree- as always breath-taking, and so deep in thought..as always your work is beautiful...you always make me read and read you again.. take care amy "love is like a butterfly-- |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Wow... Maree...this is breathtakingly gorgeous... it simply melts off the page. Hugging you... When the power of love overcomes the love of power the world will know peace. -Jimi Hendrix [This message has been edited by vlraynes (10-03-2003 04:05 PM).] |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Ogni parola che tu scrive e bella, come l'autore grins [This message has been edited by Aenimal (10-03-2003 04:12 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Wow, I also felt some similarities to the epic Ulysses reading this, sweet friend, a story of another flood similar to Noah's Ark! (kiss on cheek) You truly are a butterfly with fins, sweet friend, I love this, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Maree, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth I can see the sun set and I perceive ***Live*** [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (10-03-2003 05:02 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Now, see? I learn more every day.... Thank you again for setting me straight... Hugs... |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
DA sweet lady i got a chance to read you! nice poem |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Oh Mmy. That's just beautiful. That was my gut reaction. Thanks for the link and memory hon. Your SB. K |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Superb Maree-- left me a bit emotional Hugs Babyroo J There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Sue, I thank you and am happy you enjoyed m'friend. Cpat, hmmmm blushing here and thank you so much. Brad Majors, thank you. Martie, thank you honey glad you thought so. Brother Ed, thanks for your lovely reply, it's a nice way of putting it. Mike, sorry. but thanks n2dmystic, thank you. Ed, I thank you humbly. Susan, thank you so much. Amy, thank you sweetie for your lovely reply and you take care too. Vicky, thanks for your lovely reply and the hug. back at ya honey. Raphaele, sei mie carino amico, tanti grazie per le tue belle parole. Baci. Baci. Noah, thank you for your lovely reply. Karilea, hugs back at ya honey. Walty, wahhooo nice to see you dear and a great big thank you! SB, no words, just a great big sigh and thanks you. Jamie, sorry to leave you emotional m'friend, hugs you. And thank you. fate is not just |
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