Open Poetry #29 |
It Was Only A Dream |
froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
This poem actually isn't finished yet. Still looking for the missing link in it yet. - E.J.2003 You set my heart a fire Fill my soul with desires of sin. Closing my eyes I can feel the warmth of your touch upon my skin as my heart pounds with anticipation Reaching out for you I realized it was only a dream. |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
gee i think it's pretty darn good as is,,
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Oh E.J, this is lovely, sweet friend, I too love it as it is, maybe you can make two versions, your version ere and the one the way you are trying to shape it! (big hugggsssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet E.J, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Snowflake From Hell Senior Member
since 2003-07-10
Posts 777My own little Icey Oblivion |
i think its good how it is...i like his idea go for two versions this and the one youre tryin to make it into I feel rain pouring down. I wait to rot away, |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
I think it's mighty good the way it is. You always write with such heart. Crystal |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
Thank-you all for the nice comments. You gave me an idea Noah. Hugs to each of you :-) |
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