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Nail In My Hand
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Nail In My Hand |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 Nail In My Hand By: Noah Eaton 9/21/03 Both hands on the shovel Wearing this contagious fever blister No blood brother could take the heat I must bear this burden within my liver Aware that I've been delivered I continue to follow the highway through the sand dunes Looking for someone to tell me What would Jesus do? Shackles fastening my ankles My throat parched of thirst Save me while you still can, Lord Strike a nail in my hand Shackles fastening my ankles My throat parched of thirst Save me while you still can, Lord Strike a nail in my hand... And in this field of forlorn lambs I'll stare deep into the vanishing point Beyond this astigmatism Looking for a quiet horizon through this void I stand on hind legs again With fourth-degree sunburns, an ataxic tongue Listening for a jurisdiction As this emphysema tears apart my lungs... Shackles fastening my ankles My throat parched of thirst Save me while you still can, Lord Strike a nail in my hand Shackles fastening my ankles My throat parched of thirst Save me while you still can, Lord Strike a nail in my hand... . . . . . . . . . . . . . I now feel my own, temperate, fragile and precious, holy blood, softly dripping now slowly from my weak body . . . . . . . I now feel my own, temperate, fragile and precious, holy blood, softly dripping now slowly from my weak body . . . . . . . Now in your callous, gentle hands Where I lie sleping I will wake slowly in exhaustion Drinking the salt on the Earth you cried And I'll limp out into the distance Among this sad parade Knowing I must move on... Shackles fastening my ankles My throat parched of thirst Save me while you still can, Lord Strike a nail in my hand Shackles fastening my ankles My throat parched of thirst Save me while you still can, Lord Strike a nail in my hand... Strike a nail in my hand Only then can I rest Free of this final burden... I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth I can see the sun set and I perceive ***Live*** [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (09-21-2003 11:54 PM).] |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
Strike a nail in my hand Only then can I rest Free of this final burden... good write,,, |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
wow! breathless I am! fabulous write |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Noah, you continue to stretch yourself and this reader, as always! i must admit that this poem wasn't that easy for me to read (could feel my shudders at some parts) but i'm glad i read to the end.. well done!  |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
Noah, you put me in awe everytime and you always touch my heart and soul.  Crystal |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
This was so touching and heartfelt my friend, even the angels in heaven are crying, Jesus is so honored by your sweet love and words! (beautiful painting) Thanks for sharing your heart! God Bless you sweet Angel  ~ARH [This message has been edited by A Romantic Heart (09-22-2003 09:45 PM).] |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
You have a true gift Noah. You are blessed. hugs to you for this, Chris  Let your life lightly dance on the edges of Time like dew on the tip of a leaf. -Tagore |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I now feel my own, temperate, fragile and precious, holy blood, softly dripping now slowly from my weak body Oh, my goodness, Noah, this is so touching. I'm keeping this one, my friend.  Hugs  Ethel |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
Noah, this is deeply moving. You are truly gifted, blessed. I would love to hear you sing this. ~K~ |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed  |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
This reads through like a sad, low-toned ballad.... which is very appropriate. Your tone worked extremely well, and you kept it up from start to finish. In particular, your use of imagery, and your perspective, really helped to pack this poem with emotion. Excellent work, my friend... you should be proud of this. I very much enjoyed reading this. Brian Faith is a fine invention |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
An amazing piece of work here m'friend. Exceptionately well written. Hugs~ ~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile~ |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Noah, I sincerely want to post a reply but my oh my I have not one word for this piece of ART! I just have to shake my head in awe of your GOD given talent! Incredible, Noah! Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing Noah...James |
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Kaz Junior Member
since 2003-10-12
Posts 26 |
Wow, this was great. It reminds me of something I wrote once, not half as good though. |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
Wow Noah...This is beautiful for a beautiful man. Words I am sure makes him proud!!! You captured so much!  Love,  Terri~  Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer! |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Noah~ This was truly impressive...I am in awe. Susan |
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