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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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I would like to die, crawl up through the sky and meet you near the sun. Spread your tired wings across a pretty world made beautiful in cruelty. I can taste the change. It starts up at my eyes and ends down at my lips. See the lights behind darken and dim out. Some embers left as stars. When the city burns, I know we'll have our turn obscuring ash with smoke. The streets are all on fire. The trees are dying posts pointing without signs. Up into the sky. I would like to die. Crawling, we both cry. The signs point at the sun. Its heat destroys all context of our final chill. Wrapped close in defeat, toppled from our seats. Actions indiscrete. So take me to the clouds. Disintegrate, aloud, and follow me back down. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I would like to die, crawl up through the sky and meet you near the sun. Spread your tired wings across a pretty world made beautiful in cruelty. ============================ So take me to the clouds. Disintegrate, aloud, and follow me back down. ============================ just.... wow........ the way you turn words and images into poetry...... "If you feel heartbreak, distant thunder, lightning, earthquakes ... |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Much thanks and love, Janet. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Seems to me you crawl mighty pretty... do it again, Mike... |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
LOL@ Sunshine the greedy reader. Oddly, this seems a "phoenix" falling. Gotta love your imagery Squirrel dude! Ed |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
When the city burns, I know we'll have our turn obscuring ash with smoke. agh...you know those city lines kill me...and this Disintegrate, aloud, funny you should mention.. And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!" |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Listening to the Cure, are you? I love that album, but I love Kiss Me Kiss Me Kiss Me even more. This has been a traumatic month for me. At least I thought so, until last night capped any previous expectations of how low and painful life could get. At least my weekend was wondrous. Hence my (poetic) rage in this and many pieces today. |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
I never know what to say...I promised myself I would work on this...but I'm a procrastinator..and a really bad speller too atm...sorry.. If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Um, wha'?  Seriously, this has nothing to do with our short-circuited duet. Sheesh! I still intend us to write something wonderful, once we get a good idea to run with.No worries. .m. |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
Huh!? no no the poem left me speechless..I was talking about my commenting stuff lol...but thanks for the reassurance... If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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