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icebox
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since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

0 posted 2003-11-20 01:56 PM

Sitting by the river,
watching thick brown blood
from a heavy storm assault
flow past me
glutted with last night's mud,
like life's time line
swollen with flotsam and debris
bits of memory;

upriver is the past
and all that's been torn free,
down river is the future
what it's yet to learn to be;
this river,
old enough
to have bathed dinosaurs,
slaked the thirst
of paleolithic ancestors
and floated square rigged ships,
gurgles and chuckles
like an infant
as it slips by
full of momentary toys;

I watch an entire tree
out in the channel,
thick black serpent
grown several hundred years
now slick as if newborn,
frightened spirit broken rocks
still clutched in gnarled muddy talons,
brilliant colored Autumn's leaves
still waving from trembling fingertips
showing sideways from the flow
as if they know what awaits them
when the river meets the sea,
they really will be free;

brother Crow circles
until he lands
on what must be the perfect limb
to hitch a ride,
he cocks his head
and calls his morning cry with glee,
and me?
To it all
I'm just a moment passing by
as the river hunts the sea.

©2003 by icebox

[This message has been edited by icebox (11-20-2003 02:48 PM).]

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

1 posted 2003-11-20 02:06 PM

this somehow reminded me of when I was leaning against a brick wall and watching the busy highway just beyond the iron gate...I just happened to take a glance over my shoulder at the mortar in between the brick where a lady bug was trapped in a spider web, the hunt...the battle...the death...and no one saw it but me.

Robert Frazier
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since 2003-02-06

Posts 1014

2 posted 2003-11-20 02:08 PM

another captivating write!

Rf

Edder
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since 2003-04-02

Posts 671

3 posted 2003-11-20 02:14 PM

an amazing write, as always.

wranx
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since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

4 posted 2003-11-20 02:14 PM

Brother icebox, these scenes unfold before me with regularity (living where and how I do).

And though I see this, I'm happy to read that others do as well

(a link to my own thick brown bleeding)
I use this to tell me when it's time to, well?...run!
http://waterdata.usgs.gov/md/nwis/uv?site_no=01643000

[This message has been edited by wranx (11-20-2003 02:16 PM).]

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since 2003-01-23

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5 posted 2003-11-20 02:48 PM

This, sir, is one of your best. If anybody asks me about icebox, I'll send 'em here. Me, I'll go to my library, where it will be for a good long while.

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A Romantic Heart
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since 1999-09-03

Posts 5496
Forever In Your Heart

6 posted 2003-11-20 08:39 PM

I love how you use very little words, but the words you chose are powerful and decsribe exactly what your trying to say...

I also enjoy how you describe your words...brilliantly written.

enjoyed your thoughts

~ARH

True poets don't write with the ink of quill or pen, but with the ink of their heart~

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

7 posted 2003-11-20 08:42 PM

Icebox,  aren't we all....as life goes
right on by,  toward the sea...

You have captured it perfectly,  using
the image of a river...  IWIH thought of that!

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