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Open Poetry #29

The Clay of Men

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

0 posted 2003-11-17 10:34 PM

The Clay of Men

The captivating silence of the moderating rain beats
Stealthily…
Smoothly…
Humbling the water-soaked passion of the sullen sod,
Subtly…
Softly…
Changing the immutable into the malleable.
Surely…
Steadily…
Soundness subservient to ambivalent stillness.
Slowly…
Serenely…
The rains of life mold the clay of men.

[This message has been edited by steavenr (11-18-2003 01:05 AM).]

wintertao
Member

since 2003-11-17

Posts 366
Okaloosa Island, FL

1 posted 2003-11-17 10:37 PM

I thought this was excellent...I read ALOT of poetry since I have tons of free time, until the end of the year anyway, and I like this so much because its creative and different and tight. Well done indead.

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

2 posted 2003-11-17 11:07 PM

Welcome to Passions...

I really enjoyed this, and will look forward to more of your work....Make yourself at home here....We are glad to see you...

Kindly~

Greeneyes~
~~**~~

I had a dream last night
you came to me on silver wings of light
I flew away with you in painted sky
Was it real-
Is it what you see and touch or

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

3 posted 2003-11-17 11:13 PM

Well done! Enjoyed this very much. Welcome to the Passion's family. Chris

Let your life lightly dance on the edges of Time like dew on the tip of a leaf. -Tagore

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

4 posted 2003-11-18 12:34 PM

Thanks for the compliments all. Note to wintertao--consider your comments special, since it was your verse that inspired me to write something a little more concise.

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