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The touch of the Wind " whhheheeeeeeeuuuuuuuuuuwwwww "
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The touch of the Wind " whhheheeeeeeeuuuuuuuuuuwwwww " |
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Jes Member
since 2003-10-21
Posts 422Denmark |
Standing in the left corner were silence lost its word.. Standing in the middle were the water lost the waves.. Standing in the right corner were the fire lost the heat.. Standing in the world that lost the human hearts. Smile Jes [This message has been edited by Jes (11-16-2003 11:35 AM).] |
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Sparticus Member
since 2003-11-15
Posts 245 |
I like the use of repetition in this...spelling "middle" I love images, they give a poem substance. Good write, over all. |
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Jes Member
since 2003-10-21
Posts 422Denmark |
Smile thanks for the reply sparticus i will just get that middle word changed. Smile Jes |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Jes. Oh my goodness--this is good. With so few words, you say so much! Sadelite |
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Jes Member
since 2003-10-21
Posts 422Denmark |
Hehehhe smile thanks Sadelite, for the kind words Big smile Jes |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Jes, I like this. It's a little like Zen. Cool write. |
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Bonnie j Senior Member
since 2003-06-27
Posts 1588Ohio |
Now I recognize you. You are the one standing in the middle. Good One. See Ya Bon-Bon  |
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Jes Member
since 2003-10-21
Posts 422Denmark |
Smile Thanks Passing for the kind words. Thanks to you too Bonnie, yeah maybe i am the one with the water, but if you look behind, every sentence tells about silence, maybe im scared about if it become silent arround mee, but to say the truth im on a road were i think i need it for a while. So tahst why all my thoughts these days, i have to think over alot. But im always smiling with my words. Smile Jes |
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