A parting gift (Masquerade)

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wranx
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since 2002-06-07

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Moved from a shack to a barn

0 posted 2003-11-15 01:03 AM

Lately, she comes over me
not much more than random feelings
but each, accompanied by an image

Stepping from her claw-foot tub
shrouded by wisps of steam
and glistening
lit by a single candle

Warming her hands by the burn-barrel
the flicker, illuminating her pout
and the greasy thumbprint
above her eyebrow

Her, huddled by the hearth
in that damned old ranch house
rounding out the geometry
of a Navajo blanket

And now, I realize
that I had never seen her
in a harsh light

lil' Angel
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since 2003-11-14

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1 posted 2003-11-15 01:08 AM

I really liked this poem. Nice job

icebox
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since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

2 posted 2003-11-15 01:08 AM

For some
special people
there is no harsh light;
they are pure with the light that is.

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

3 posted 2003-11-15 01:11 AM

Awww wranx, you are both so lovely in the light of love.

What a guy, and such a lucky lady,
she deserves every word you write~

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

4 posted 2003-11-15 01:24 AM

Hey Baby?

he is going to love this . . .
you done good
*smile*
I didnt even know it was you
Had to look twice
*grin*

Nice gift eheh
xxoo

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

5 posted 2003-11-15 02:00 AM

Yep, the Capt. is going to love it, Ed.
I sure do. This is good writing!!

PouringJewels
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since 2003-09-18

Posts 158
Maryland

6 posted 2003-11-15 04:27 AM

Nice write, but who has randam feelings?

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

7 posted 2003-11-15 05:45 AM

. . .

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

8 posted 2003-11-15 07:17 AM

Smiling...you're answering your own
challenge in a very special way.

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

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Portland, Oregon

9 posted 2003-11-15 02:00 PM

(sigh) Oh Ed, this is so very clever, sweet friend, then again I think we all look somewhat different in every different light and seeing youn in this only engages more of your poetic versatility skill! (big hugggssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ed, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

10 posted 2003-11-15 02:23 PM

lol~ goes to show how much I know...

Sheesh???

Dee
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since 2000-08-19

Posts 2330
Queensland, Australia

11 posted 2003-11-17 06:55 AM

wranx, I have been out of the loop a bit long to know off the top of my head who this masquerading is, but it is an incredible write none the less.

Dee

Stand straight and tall, not the reflection as others see you, but as you truely are. Clearwater

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

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Gaia

12 posted 2003-11-17 08:11 AM

another vibrant image wranx style
(I read more wranx than Cap'n)

I especially enjoyed:
"rounding out the geometry
of a Navajo blanket"
superb, Ed

[This message has been edited by Midnitesun (11-17-2003 08:12 AM).]

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

13 posted 2003-11-17 08:25 AM

Lately, she comes over me
not much more than random feelings
but each, accompanied by an image

Stepping from her claw-foot tub
shrouded by wisps of steam
and glistening
lit by a single candle

Warming her hands by the burn-barrel
the flicker, illuminating her pout
and the greasy thumbprint
above her eyebrow

Her, huddled by the hearth
in that damned old ranch house
rounding out the geometry
of a Navajo blanket

And now, I realize
that I had never seen her
in a harsh light
or been blinded by the quiet beauty
as she rose on mornings greyer
than windswept hills, half lit
by moon and wishes.

I reached for her last night.
Past the turn of wheels and faults
but found only the smokey smell
left in my nostrils as I woke
remembering again
random touches on skin browned by sun
and the smell of pine smoke

pungency rough scratched on memory

leaving only initials
that spelled
M.T.

coyote
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since 2001-03-17

Posts 1077

14 posted 2003-11-17 08:48 AM

Excellent piece......
there is much said here.

coyote 8)

EvocativeVerse2
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since 2003-09-10

Posts 1279

15 posted 2003-11-17 10:14 AM

Love this...love cpats response. The two blend together into the perfect form. Well done wranx and cpat.

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

16 posted 2003-11-17 10:42 AM

Man, am I glad I come in to read responses...

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

17 posted 2003-11-17 10:55 AM

wranx,
As smooth as whipped cream. LOL

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

18 posted 2003-11-17 10:57 AM

Well done!! I knew within the first couple lines!

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

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